Re: Sentence in COGA Note

Hi Lisa

The last suggested wording is 23 words:

"Design and content choices can impact usage in ways that make it difficult
or impossible for some people with cognitive and learning disabilities.”

 I think this is simpler than the original which is 25 words and this
rewrite is putting the focus on the content rather than the author. At any
rate, the current document is 200 pages long with plenty of sentences
that are not as simple as this. I think this rewrite is fine.

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On Tue, May 5, 2020 at 10:05 PM lisa.seeman <lisa.seeman@zoho.com> wrote:

> When possible we try and use easier language. This includes easy common
> words, short sentences, active voice and remove extra words.
>
> Removing extra words that do not add to the meaning is also important.
>
> All the best
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> ---- On Tue, 05 May 2020 22:30:52 +0300 * charles.hall@mrm.com
> <charles.hall@mrm.com> * wrote ----
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> If ‘usage’ is the functional outcome that is impacted, perhaps this is
> even simpler?
>
>
>
> “Design and content choices can impact usage in ways that make it
> difficult or impossible for some people with cognitive and learning
> disabilities.”
>
>
>
> So if you stripped away the modifiers, it simply states “choices impact
> people”.
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> *Charles Hall* // Senior UX Architect
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> *From: *David MacDonald <david@can-adapt.com>
> *Date: *Tuesday, May 5, 2020 at 2:54 PM
> *To: *"Hall, Charles (DET-MRM)" <charles.hall@mrm.com>
> *Cc: *Jonathan Avila <jon.avila@levelaccess.com>, David Fazio <
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> *Subject: *[EXTERNAL] Re: Sentence in COGA Note
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> HI Charles
>
>
>
> Would this work for you
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>
>
>
>
> "Design and content choices can impact perceivability, understandability
> and/or usability in ways that make it difficult or impossible for some
> people with cognitive and learning disabilities to use this content."
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> On Tue, May 5, 2020 at 2:38 PM Hall, Charles (DET-MRM) <
> charles.hall@mrm.com> wrote:
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> I too like shifting from creator to creation. However, this now implies
> that the impact is to the content itself versus the impact being on the
> user. It also uses the word content several times.
>
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>
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> *Charles Hall* // Senior UX Architect
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> *From: *Jonathan Avila <jon.avila@levelaccess.com>
> *Date: *Tuesday, May 5, 2020 at 2:37 PM
> *To: *David Fazio <dfazio@helixopp.com>, David MacDonald <
> david@can-adapt.com>
> *Cc: *WCAG <w3c-wai-gl@w3.org>, "lisa.seeman" <lisa.seeman@zoho.com>,
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> *Resent-Date: *Tuesday, May 5, 2020 at 2:37 PM
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> That wording is fine with me too.
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> Jonathan
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> *Sent:* Tuesday, May 5, 2020 2:24 PM
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> I do see how you’ve shifted the lens with the verbiage. The new wording is
> less abrasive. I wouldn’t oppose the change.
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> On May 5, 2020, at 11:15 AM, David MacDonald <david@can-adapt.com> wrote:
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> Hi all
>
>
>
> on the call today there was quite a lively discussion around this sentence.
>
>
>
> CURRENT
>
> "People with cognitive and learning disabilities may not be able to
> effectively use web content because of the design and content choices of
> the author."
>
> I've gone back and tried to capture the essence of Lisa's rationale, while
> steering the focus to the design/content and rather than the author. I also
> used John Avila's word "impact" rather than "because".
>
>
>
> SUGGESTED
> Design and content choices can impact the content in ways that make it
> difficult or impossible for some users with cognitive and learning
> disabilities to use this content.
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