Re: Request review of prov-dc

Hi Craig,
I incorpored your feedback to the document:
http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/default/dc-note/Overview.html

Since you rewrote some paragraphs, I added you as a contributor
in the author list.

ISSUE 603 is now pending review.

Best,
Daniel

2012/11/23 Daniel Garijo <dgarijo@delicias.dia.fi.upm.es>

> Thanks for your feedback, Craig.
> Tracker, this is issue 603: https://www.w3.org/2011/prov/track/issues/603
> Best,
> Daniel
>
> 2012/11/22 Craig M Trim <cmtrim@us.ibm.com>
>
>> Hi Paul, et al -
>>
>> I've performed an initial review, focused entirely on the introduction.
>>  It's going to take me longer to go through the rest of the document,
>> including the more technical mappings.  I've made enough changes in the
>> introduction however, that I felt it worthwhile to send out my changes.  No
>> obligation to accept these verbatim; my style is by no means perfect.
>>  However, as is often the case in writing, what we write in summary makes a
>> better introduction.  I've moved the conclusion up to the beginning, as it
>> seemed the clearest way to approach the document.  Likewise, the example
>> has been moved toward the end of the document.  By the time the reader
>> approaches the example, the terms and expressions used should be much
>> clearer (the text provides insight to the example in this case, not the
>> other way around).
>>
>> I'm attaching multiple formats - I originally edited in Word 2003, but
>> have an open office writer and PDF version too - something here for
>> everyone :)
>>
>> *(See attached file: PROV-DC revision.doc)**(See attached file: PROV-DC
>> revision.pdf)**(See attached file: PROV-DC revision.odt)*
>>
>>
>> -Craig
>>
>> [image: Inactive hide details for Paul Groth ---11/21/2012 05:40:08
>> PM---Hi Simon, Craig, all: Can you go ahead and review prov-dc for]Paul
>> Groth ---11/21/2012 05:40:08 PM---Hi Simon, Craig, all: Can you go ahead
>> and review prov-dc for release as a first public working
>>
>> From: Paul Groth <p.t.groth@vu.nl>
>> To: Simon Miles <simon.miles@kcl.ac.uk>, Craig M Trim/Costa
>> Mesa/IBM@IBMUS,
>> Cc: Provenance Working Group WG <public-prov-wg@w3.org>, Daniel Garijo <
>> dgarijo@delicias.dia.fi.upm.es>
>> Date: 11/21/2012 05:40 PM
>> Subject: Request review of prov-dc
>> Sent by: pgroth@gmail.com
>> ------------------------------
>>
>>
>>
>> Hi Simon, Craig, all:
>>
>> Can you go ahead and review prov-dc for release as a first public working
>> draft?
>>
>> You can find the document here:
>>
>> *http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/839d503bd064/dc-note/Overview.html*<http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/839d503bd064/dc-note/Overview.html>
>>
>> The key question is to see whether the document is ready for release as
>> an fpwd.
>>
>> If it is possible, can you have your review done by Nov. 29?
>>
>> Anyone else in the working group is also invited to review the document.
>>
>> Thanks
>> Paul
>>
>>
>