Comments for WD-rdf-concepts-20030123

These are minor editorial comments for your "Resource Description
Framework (RDF): Concepts and Abstract Syntax" Last Call Working Draft [1].

minor typos:
s/world-wide/worldwide/
s/references.The/references. The/
s/it's use/its use/
s/website/Web site/
s/XML Namespaces/Namespaces in XML/
s/Normal Form C/Normalization Form C/
in 6.5.1 s/RDF Literals/RDF literals/
in 6.5.2 s/RDF Graphs/RDF graphs/
in 7 s/RDF URI Reference/RDF URI reference/
s/itself, at least, also/itself, at least, and also/

cite { color: navy } is nice but close to link blue. I'd pick another
color not used for links in the W3C style sheet. What does navy mean?
(It appears in both normative and informative sections.)

     The framework is designed so that vocabularies can be layered on
     top of a core. The RDF core and RDF vocabulary definition (RDF
     schema) languages [RDF-VOCABULARY] are the first such vocabularies.
sounds like a core layered on a core. I'm not sure if that is what you
meant.

This sentence:
     A convention used by some linear representations of an RDF graph to
     allow several statements to reference the same blank node is to use
     a blank node identifier, which is a local identifier that can be
     distinguished from all URIs and literals.
could read something like:
     To allow several statements to reference the same blank node, some
     linear representations of an RDF graph use a blank node identifier.
     This local identifier can be distinguished from all URIs and literals.

Please avoid we (see http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#ref-PRONOUNS).
I think you can say (without the we):
     assume that the URI part (i.e. excluding fragment identifier)
     indicates a Web resource with an RDF representation

In 3.1, property is aka predicate and in 6.1, predicate is aka property.
I would say this the same way both times.

[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/WD-rdf-concepts-20030123/

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Received on Monday, 24 February 2003 00:50:39 UTC