- From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
- Date: Fri, 13 Sep 2019 06:06:16 +0200
- To: shawn@w3.org
- Cc: "wai-eo-editors@w3.org" <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
Hi Shawn, Many thanks for your extensive and helpful comments. I addressed most of them in the latest update. Some issues are on the agenda for discussion. Below are some responses to specific comments: On 13/09/2019 03:27, Shawn Henry via WBS Mailer wrote: [SNIP] >> --------------------------------- >> Video 1: Evaluation Overview [SNIP] > 6: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical…" > -> "Even if you are new to web accessibility and not technical…" > Also, I wonder about "new to accessibility"? … so maybe: > -> "Even if you don't know anything about web accessibility yet and you're > not technical…" I don't like "don't know anything". Hardly anyone coming here would not know anything about accessibility. Do you have other suggestions? [SNIP] > 6: "… get a rough [idea] of how well you are doing." > -> "… get a rough [idea] of the accessibility of a web page." > R: We imagine that people use Easy Checks to check *other* pages besides > their own. > Note: You say the in the Easy Checks video. If you want to leave this one > as is for flow, I'm totally fine with that. How about "get a rough idea of the accessibility" only? [SNIP] >> --------------------------------- >> Video 2: Preliminary Evaluation [SNIP] > 2: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical, you can do > some easy checks to get a rough impression of the accessibility of any web > page." > [See comments on Overview video script] ACK (keeping a tab on this comment for later edits). [SNIP] > 7: "…can still give you a general idea of how well you are doing." > -> "…can still give you a general idea of how well a page addresses > accessibility." > R: May be doing the checks on a vendor, competitor, or other site/ Using "of the accessibility", in line with the prior edits. [SNIP] > 9: "The first step to accessibility is understanding where you are" > This not feeling tight For one thing, that assumes checking own website, > whereas we're saying "webpage from your own website, from your competitor, > or from vendors you might want to work with." Another point is we usually > say get a basic understanding of accessibility first (ideally anyway) – > e.g., https://www.w3.org/WAI/planning/interim-repairs/ says "If you are > new to accessibility, it is often helpful to first get a basic > understanding of accessibility:" True that then it goes into "Identify the > Issues". Changed to: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away with finding some of the accessibility barriers." [SNIP] >> --------------------------------- >> Video 3: Selecting and Using Tools [SNIP] > 9: "They address different audiences, such as content authors, code > developers, designers, and product owners." > -> "Different tools help with different tasks, such as designing, coding, > developing content, and project management. > [medium] "address different audiences" is not right for the target > users/tasks of tools Changed to "They support different roles in a project team, such as content authors, code developers, designers, and product owners." [SNIP] > 14: "Equipped with the right tools and knowledge on how to use them, you > are in good shape to find and remove accessibility barriers." > ??? This makes it sound like you *need* tools to find and remove > accessibility barriers. I'm not sure we want to say that. Also this makes > it sound like there are "right tools" and wrong tools. (Also "find > accessibility barriers" – OK ; "remove accessibility barriers" – not > sure.) > Possibly something more like: "Tools that work well in your environment and > the knowledge to use them, can help you find accessibility barriers more > efficiently so you can fix them." Changed to: "Equipped with tools and knowledge on how to use them, you are in good shape to find accessibility barriers more efficiently." Thanks, Shadi -- Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI) World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
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