- From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
- Date: Fri, 13 Sep 2019 10:30:07 -0500
- To: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
- Cc: "wai-eo-editors@w3.org" <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
Thanks, Shadi! replies below: On 9/12/2019 11:06 PM, Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: > Hi Shawn, > > Many thanks for your extensive and helpful comments. I addressed most of them in the latest update. Some issues are on the agenda for discussion. Below are some responses to specific comments: > > > On 13/09/2019 03:27, Shawn Henry via WBS Mailer wrote: > [SNIP] >>> --------------------------------- >>> Video 1: Evaluation Overview > [SNIP] >> 6: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical…" >> -> "Even if you are new to web accessibility and not technical…" >> Also, I wonder about "new to accessibility"? … so maybe: >> -> "Even if you don't know anything about web accessibility yet and you're >> not technical…" > > I don't like "don't know anything". Hardly anyone coming here would not know anything about accessibility. Do you have other suggestions? Good point. Maybe "don't know much"? > > > [SNIP] >> 6: "… get a rough [idea] of how well you are doing." >> -> "… get a rough [idea] of the accessibility of a web page." >> R: We imagine that people use Easy Checks to check *other* pages besides >> their own. >> Note: You say the in the Easy Checks video. If you want to leave this one >> as is for flow, I'm totally fine with that. > > How about "get a rough idea of the accessibility" only? yup, OK. (that might not be sufficient stand alone -- would need another word after accessibility (e.g., the accessibility barriers or the accessibility status or such) -- yet I think fine in context) > > > [SNIP] >>> --------------------------------- >>> Video 2: Preliminary Evaluation > [SNIP] >> 2: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical, you can do >> some easy checks to get a rough impression of the accessibility of any web >> page." >> [See comments on Overview video script] > > ACK (keeping a tab on this comment for later edits). > > [SNIP] >> 7: "…can still give you a general idea of how well you are doing." >> -> "…can still give you a general idea of how well a page addresses >> accessibility." >> R: May be doing the checks on a vendor, competitor, or other site/ > > Using "of the accessibility", in line with the prior edits. > > > [SNIP] >> 9: "The first step to accessibility is understanding where you are" >> This not feeling tight For one thing, that assumes checking own website, >> whereas we're saying "webpage from your own website, from your competitor, >> or from vendors you might want to work with." Another point is we usually >> say get a basic understanding of accessibility first (ideally anyway) – >> e.g., https://www.w3.org/WAI/planning/interim-repairs/ says "If you are >> new to accessibility, it is often helpful to first get a basic >> understanding of accessibility:" True that then it goes into "Identify the >> Issues". > > Changed to: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away with finding some of the accessibility barriers." good! ... actually: - second "with": "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away finding some of the accessibility barriers." could - "of the": "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away finding some accessibility barriers." hummm.. "finding barriers" is assuming there are barriers, and maybe not good to say that way? maybe: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking if there are some accessibility barriers." perhaps: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking for some accessibility barriers." perhaps: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking some accessibility issues." > > > [SNIP] >>> --------------------------------- >>> Video 3: Selecting and Using Tools > [SNIP] >> 9: "They address different audiences, such as content authors, code >> developers, designers, and product owners." >> -> "Different tools help with different tasks, such as designing, coding, >> developing content, and project management. >> [medium] "address different audiences" is not right for the target >> users/tasks of tools > > Changed to "They support different roles in a project team, such as content authors, code developers, designers, and product owners." OK. > > > [SNIP] >> 14: "Equipped with the right tools and knowledge on how to use them, you >> are in good shape to find and remove accessibility barriers." >> ??? This makes it sound like you *need* tools to find and remove >> accessibility barriers. I'm not sure we want to say that. Also this makes >> it sound like there are "right tools" and wrong tools. (Also "find >> accessibility barriers" – OK ; "remove accessibility barriers" – not >> sure.) >> Possibly something more like: "Tools that work well in your environment and >> the knowledge to use them, can help you find accessibility barriers more >> efficiently so you can fix them." > > Changed to: "Equipped with tools and knowledge on how to use them, you are in good shape to find accessibility barriers more efficiently." Good! ~Shawn > > > Thanks, > Shadi >
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