- From: William Loughborough <love26@gorge.net>
- Date: Thu, 21 Sep 2000 07:42:31 -0700
- To: seeman@netvision.net.il, w3c-wai-gl@w3.org
At 09:12 AM 9/21/00 +0000, lisa kestenbaum wrote:
>review the text with these considerations in mind prior to publication on
>the web.
WL: Perhaps a full stop after "mind"?
No matter how old I get, I still have a hard time becoming oriented to
"orientate". It's the same kind of "bloviation" as we find when what
commentators do isn't to comment (as it was in my youth <g>), but to
"commentate".
LK:: Insinuations and trends that are intended to be identified by
analyzing the structure, should be explicitly stated in the summary.
WL: In a search for excellence occasional nuggets occur and this should IMO
be topmore (How's that for a corruption of "topmost"?).
LK::" [from 3.5]"...provide abbreviated labels..." [from 3.10]"...provide
expansions for abbreviations and acronyms..."
WL: These (and there may be others) might benefit from "gathering"?
LK:: 3.11 "...This can be improved by:
a) Restricting these items to one section of the page can help the user
retain focus.
b) For a content filled site, one may further provide the user with an
option view without banners..."
WL: some grammar change ("can" to "to" in a and for b "For a content-filled
site, providing an optional banner-free view")?
LK:: "4, Design for ease browsing and navigation"
WL: Either "ease of" or "easy"?
LK:: "To help the User's navigate: [The old "gratuitous apostrohe"?]
a) They should be easy to locate within the over-all structure of the content.
b) They should be consistent across web pages or related documents?
WL: I'm confused about to whom "they" refer - surely we don't need to
locate consistent users across Web pages <g>.
LK:: "...examples of this includes..." and "...all links have a textual
equivalents...."
WL: Number, please?
In summary I think this is really good stuff or I wouldn't be making these
picky little proofreads.
I vote for incorporation!
--
Love.
ACCESSIBILITY IS RIGHT - NOT PRIVILEGE
Received on Thursday, 21 September 2000 10:44:16 UTC