Re: comment on wording at beginning of SPARQL Query Language for RDF

On Wed, 2006-02-22 at 16:37 -0500, Peter F. Patel-Schneider wrote:
> From: Dan Connolly <connolly@w3.org>
> Subject: Re: comment on wording at beginning of SPARQL Query Language for RDF
> Date: Wed, 22 Feb 2006 15:04:29 -0600
> 
> > On Wed, 2006-02-22 at 15:32 -0500, Peter F. Patel-Schneider wrote:
> > > I just started reading
> > > 
> > > 	http://www.w3.org/TR/2006/WD-rdf-sparql-query-20060220/
> > > 
> > > and was brought up short by the poor wording at its very beginning:
> > > 
> > > 	An RDF graph is a set of triples; each triple consists of a subject, a
> > > 	predicate and an object. This is defined in RDF Concepts and Abstract
> > > 	Syntax [CONCEPTS]. These triples can come from a variety of sources.
> > 
> > 
> > Perhaps I have just read it too many times, but I can't see anything
> > wrong with that wording.
> 
> The referent of the "This" could be one of any number of things.  It could the 
> "RDF graph", "triple", "set of triples", "subject", "predicate', or "object".
> There are even other possibilities for the referent of "This".

I see now. Thanks.

> > > Surely better wording can be generated, particularly at this important part of
> > > the document.
> > 
> > Do you have any improvements to suggest?
> 
> Yes, certainly.  However, the improvement depends on the meaning of the excerpt,
> which I cannot discern.

OK. Please stay tuned for a substantive reply.

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