- From: Khalid Belhajjame <Khalid.Belhajjame@cs.man.ac.uk>
- Date: Tue, 2 Apr 2013 18:46:49 +0100
- To: Luc Moreau <l.moreau@ecs.soton.ac.uk>
- Cc: "public-prov-wg@w3.org" <public-prov-wg@w3.org>
Hi Luc and Tim, I read the Linking Across Provenance Bundles document, and here are some comments that I hope will be helpful Best, khalid ------------ C1. In the fourth paragraph, you state that "It is the capability of referring to the description of the entity, as created by the producer in this specific bundle, that is of interest to us in this specification." Some text that explains why you are interested in doing so, may help the reader follow. C2. The second paragraph in Section 2 states that "Some applications may want to augment the descriptions of entity e1 found in bundle b with other information. They cannot add these descriptions to bundle b since this would result in a different bundle." Here too, it may not be clear for the reader what the problem in creating a new bundle 2. C3. I think that the introduction as well as the beginning of Section 2, where the concept of Mention is introduced, as a bit dry, in the sense that they are not accompanied by examples that can help the reader follows the argument or understand how mentionOf is used. In this respect, Example 1 can be introduced earlier and used as a means of motivating the need for a construct like mentionOf in the beginning of Section 2. C4. In the second paragraph in Section 2, "found in bundle b" -> "found in a bundle b". Later on in the same section, "the entity e1 may described" -> "the entity e1 may be described" C5. I found Example 2 slightly difficult to follow. In particular, the reader is not taken through the first turtle excerpt, which contains both the specification of the bundle obs:bundle1, and provenance records specifying the provenance of such a bundle as a whole. In example 2, "it may useful" -> "it may be useful" On 28 March 2013 10:55, Luc Moreau <l.moreau@ecs.soton.ac.uk> wrote: > > Dear all, > > I made an editorial pass over prov-links. > > The staged version, in its final NOTE form, is available from: > https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/default/links/releases/NOTE-prov-links-20130430/Overview.html > > It is now ready for internal review. We will assign reviewers today during > the > call. > > Cheers, > Luc > > -- > Professor Luc Moreau > Electronics and Computer Science tel: +44 23 8059 4487 > University of Southampton fax: +44 23 8059 2865 > Southampton SO17 1BJ email: l.moreau@ecs.soton.ac.uk > United Kingdom http://www.ecs.soton.ac.uk/~lavm > >
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