- From: Jose M. Alonso <josema@w3.org>
- Date: Tue, 21 Apr 2009 12:35:05 +0200
- To: Sharron Rush <srush@knowbility.org>
- Cc: eGov IG <public-egov-ig@w3.org>, Kevin Novak <kevinnovak@aia.org>
Thanks much for your comments, Sharron. Attaching them also to ISSUE-24. More in a separate message. -- Jose ps: Kevin, lots of work ahead for you! El 17/04/2009, a las 17:02, Sharron Rush escribió: > Hello folks, > > First congratulations and deepest thanks for the work you have all > done in producing this document. I can't think of any more > important use of technology than to establish an effective two-way > dialogue between citizens and their governments. So please know > that my comments are offered with sincere respect and appreciation > for all that you have done. > > We have been reviewing the document in the WAI Education and > Outreach Working Group (EOWG) from the point of view of the > treatment of accessibility for people with disabilities. EOWG has > been compiling those comments and they will be submitted > separately. My comments here will be more general and are offered > as an individual rather than a group representative. > > The idea of a W3C document about open government/e-government is > tremendous and timely. In my opinion, we must make the first > document a model of the openness and transparency we hope and expect > for governments to achieve. With that in mind, I suggest a > reorganization of the document as follows: > > 1. Clarity - why is the document being developed? statement of > principles and goals > 2. Simplification - move some of the more detailed aspects into > related documents, but keep first working draft on higher level > 3. Improve focus - The Introduction and a few of the other sections > are somewhat rambling and do not seem related to each other and/or > to specific to governmental issues. The document needs to be edited > for coherence and narrative flow. > > I hesitate to be more specific in my comments since I know that > there are serious time constraints. I have been sending the URL > around to others that I know are interested in e-government and who > are working on related issues. One reported back to me that she was > unable to make her way through the entire doc without getting > "lost." Another noted to me (and I hope sent public comment) that > the citizen viewpoint needs to be included more strongly and that > more acknowledgement is needed of the way technology enables two-way > interactions, not simply a way to make existing government more > efficient. > > I am not sure how the editing is organized, but would suggest that > whoever leads the development of each section look for ways to > shorten and clarify and that the editors look for ways to improve > the structure and the way that sections relate to the overarching > principles. > > Please let me know if this is useful and/or if I can help in any way. > > Thanks again for taking this on - it is tremendously important! > > Best, > Sharron > > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ > Sharron Rush | Executive Director | www.Knowbility.org | 512 > 305-0310 > Equal access to technology for people with disabilities >
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