LC-978 OK w/comment [was: Re: Your comments on WCAG 2.0 Last Call Draft...]

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>Comment 17:
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>Source: http://www.w3.org/mid/p06110403c0bf326d6713@[10.0.1.5]
>(Issue ID: LC-978)

Accept with suggested edit

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>unenforceably vague
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>Proposed Change:
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>"item which system feels to be in error is identified."
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>Response from Working Group:
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>Thank you for your comment. We have revised SC 3.3.1 (formerly 2.5.1)
>as follows:
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>If an input error is automatically detected, the item that is in error
>is identified and described to the user in text.

suggestion:

s/identified and described/identified and what is wrong is described/

Discussion: The grammar of the sentence without the edit says that
the *item* that is in error is described to the user. What you want
is that *the error* is described to the user. Be even plainer; say
"what is wrong is described to the user."

The present sentence is a mislocution: it doesn't say what you
meant to say.

"and the error is described to the user..." is good

"and the nature of the error is described to the user..." is better

"and what is wrong is described to the user..." is yet better.

IMHO.

Al

Received on Friday, 22 June 2007 23:33:00 UTC