Re: last changes?

to help  i've added come comments below 


these all look like good intentions — but as an author I really don’t know what you mean  — what it requires of me — what is covered or not.   

I think “financial loss”  is clear — but “significant financial loss”  leaves me without any measure of where the line is. 



Gregg C Vanderheiden
greggvan@umd.edu



> On Feb 21, 2017, at 9:47 AM, lisa.seeman <lisa.seeman@zoho.com> wrote:
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> Hi folks
> Can we tighten up the wording at all for the following
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> important information
> information the user may need to complete any action or task including an offline task, or related to safety, risks, privacy, health or opportunities
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I am an author looking at this and trying to comply.   some questions I might have 

what do you mean by   MAY need?     What if they don’t have good language skills and need to know what the definition of even basic words like  “before” or “until”      How do I know what the user needs
you say offline task — this appears to open it up to anything.  How does the author know what offline tasks the person is trying to use this page for?     Does every page need a calculator? or address book or ??? 
it mentions risks but not what kind of risks?  What did you have in mind?    
 it says  “ANY ACTION OR TASK  — then gives a list.   If it is ANY - then why provide a list of just some?    Arent they all covered by ANY?  
what does opportunities mean? 


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> critical service
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> service that is needed to prevent significant harm, risk or loss such as: significant financial loss, illness, injury or deterioration in a patient's condition or effective loss of rights or freedoms
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How much money is ‘significant’?   
what kind of injuries are insignificant ? 
what is critical to freedom and what is not? 



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> Lisa Seeman
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