Opsdir last call review of draft-ietf-httpbis-alias-proxy-status-05

Reviewer: Menachem Dodge
Review result: Has Nits

Reviewer: Menachem Dodge
Review result: Has Nits

I have reviewed this document as part of the Ops area directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Ops area directors.
Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other
last-call comments.

Summary
This document defines the next-hop-aliases HTTP Proxy-Status Parameter.

NITS:

1. Abstract
OLD --> This parameter carries the list of aliases and canonical names an
intermediary received during DNS resolution as part establishing a connection
to the next hop. NEW --> This parameter carries the list of aliases and
canonical names an intermediary received during DNS resolution as part of
establishing a connection to the next hop.

2. Section 2
OLD --> Note that while this example includes both the next-hop and
next-hop-aliases parameters, next-hop-aliases can be included without including
next-hop. NEW --> Note that while this example includes both the next-hop and
next-hop-aliases parameters, next-hop-aliases can be included without including
the next-hop.

3. Section 3
OLD --> Implementations ought to note that the full chain of names might not
available in common DNS resolution APIs, such as getaddrinfo. NEW -->
Implementations ought to note that the full chain of names might not be
available in common DNS resolution APIs, such as getaddrinfo.

Thank you kindly.
Best Regards,
Menachem Dodge

Received on Tuesday, 10 October 2023 11:26:45 UTC