Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-httpbis-digest-headers-12: (with COMMENT)

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-httpbis-digest-headers-12

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Joel Halpern for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/hOSKIuNLtGQoGLri4c1auAF9kP4).

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Outdated references

Document references `draft-ietf-httpbis-message-signatures-16`, but `-17` is
the latest available revision.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 3.2, paragraph 1
```
fication. How to deal with an ignored preferences is a scenario that should b
                           ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The plural noun "preferences" cannot be used with the article "an". Did you
mean "an ignored preference" or "ignored preferences"?

#### Section 6.1, paragraph 2
```
es of Content-Type, Content-Encoding etc). A signature that protects Integri
                                     ^^^
```
A period is needed after the abbreviation "etc.".

#### "B.6.", paragraph 7
```
Repr-Digest is designed to be independent from the use of one or more transf
                              ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independent of"?

#### "B.11.", paragraph 6
```
e Digest field. This resulted in a mixed of formats such as base64, hex or d
                                   ^^^^^
```
The phrase "a mixed of" is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between
"a" and "of".

#### "Appendix E.", paragraph 1
```
ncrypted content * Digest is independent from MESSAGING and HTTP/1.1 is not
                             ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independent of"?

## Notes

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Received on Thursday, 25 May 2023 05:51:39 UTC