Re: Developing Websites for Older People (batch 3. done!)

Thank you for the comments Shawn! Hope you had a good trip so far.

Best,
   Shadi


On 02.09.2010 23:22, Shawn Henry wrote:
> Hi Andrew,
>
> Reminder of our IRC conversation about consistency. (summary: good for
> readers, even though dull for editor <smile>)
>
> * Suggest changing "WCAG requirements" -> "WCAG success criteria"
>
> * In many places you have:
> 0.0.0 - Handle (AAA) says "a mechanism...
> Some places you have:
> 0.0.0 - Handle (AAA) requires that "a mechanism...
>
> For several reasons, I suggest changing all the "requires" (and
> "requirements", etc.) to "says"s.
>
> That will also simplify the wording, eg:
> "requires users to be able to turn off, adjust, or extend any time
> limits" ->
> "says that users can turn off, adjust, or extend any time limits"
>
> I suggested changes for a few of these if I was editing them for
> something else, but did not change most of them.
>
> * Suggest editing use of "some older people experience xyz" where
> feasible and other such uses of "experience". Please change things like
> "some older people experience difficulty understanding forms" to "some
> older people have difficulty understanding forms". I could be talked
> into the benefits of "some older people experience cognitive decline"
> versus "some older people have cognitive decline"...
>
> * Sometimes the WCAG quoted material after "says" starts with a capital,
> but usually not. I understand why, however, it looks like a mistake.
> Consider starting all with lowercase
>
> * I ran out of steam and marked some as [edit] that maybe you'll have
> other ideas for once you've gone through it?
>
> Attached has suggestions tracked.
>
> That's it from me (finally)!
>
> ~Shawn
>
>
>
> -------- Original Message --------
> Subject: Developing Websites for Older People (batch 1 of 3 or so)
> Date: Thu, 02 Sep 2010 08:24:23 -0500
> From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
> To: Andrew Arch <andrew@w3.org>
> CC: wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
>
> Hi Andrew,
>
> I really like how the document has come together! Overall, I think this
> is the right amount of detail and very good organization.
>
> Comments that apply throughout:
> ...
>
>

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Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ |
   WAI International Program Office Activity Lead   |
  W3C Evaluation & Repair Tools Working Group Chair |

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