Developing Websites for Older People (batch 3. done!)

Hi Andrew,

Reminder of our IRC conversation about consistency. (summary: good for readers, even though dull for editor <smile>)

* Suggest changing "WCAG requirements" -> "WCAG success criteria"

* In many places you have:
0.0.0 - Handle (AAA) says "a mechanism...
Some places you have:
0.0.0 - Handle (AAA) requires that "a mechanism...

For several reasons, I suggest changing all the "requires" (and "requirements", etc.) to "says"s.

That will also simplify the wording, eg:
"requires users to be able to turn off, adjust, or extend any time limits" ->
"says that users can turn off, adjust, or extend any time limits"

I suggested changes for a few of these if I was editing them for something else, but did not change most of them.

* Suggest editing use of "some older people experience xyz" where feasible and other such uses of "experience". Please change things like "some older people experience difficulty understanding forms" to "some older people have difficulty understanding forms". I could be talked into the benefits of "some older people experience cognitive decline" versus "some older people have cognitive decline"...

* Sometimes the WCAG quoted material after "says" starts with a capital, but usually not. I understand why, however, it looks like a mistake. Consider starting all with lowercase

* I ran out of steam and marked some as [edit] that maybe you'll have other ideas for once you've gone through it?

Attached has suggestions tracked.

That's it from me (finally)!

~Shawn



-------- Original Message --------
Subject: Developing Websites for Older People (batch 1 of 3 or so)
Date: Thu, 02 Sep 2010 08:24:23 -0500
From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
To: Andrew Arch <andrew@w3.org>
CC: wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>

Hi Andrew,

I really like how the document has come together! Overall, I think this is the right amount of detail and very good organization.

Comments that apply throughout:
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