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RE: "How PWD use the Web" comments

From: <saylordj@wellsfargo.com>
Date: Fri, 9 Jul 2004 05:18:02 -0700
Message-ID: <5F4C8CF803342448A809AADE36C7B03C07BFEAD2@msgsw55cacah05.wellsfargo.com>
To: w3c-wai-eo@w3.org

Hello All,
Picking up on Roberto's comment I thought I would suggest this version of
what he found.  "Assistive technology products help people with disabilities
to accomplish task they either could not do or not easily do."

In this sentence from the dyslexia section: She was initially worried about
reading load, since she reads slowly.

Doyle
I believe it better to insert the pronoun her in the sentence this way:  She
was initially worried about her reading load, since she reads slowly.

This sentence fragment in the next paragraph:  those help her focus in
quickly on sections

Doyle
Re-arrange this way 'those help her quickly focus on sections'.

Down the document at the Cognitive and neurological disabilities  dyslexia
dyscalcula section this phrase is awkward:  'when read visually'.  Read
visually?  Read usually means looking at words.  A redundant
characterization.

At Alternative keyboards or switches section where it says:  ' that appear
to come from the standard keyboard'  is confusing to me.  The word appear
here does not correctly describe the issue.  I would just write 'that come
from the standard keyboard'.

Overall the writing is clear and useful.  I have the suggestions above and
otherwise approve of the text.
Doyle


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In the first paragraph of "Assistive Technologies and Adaptive Strategies"
chapter, i found:
"Assistive technologies are products used by people with disabilities to
help accomplish tasks that they cannot accomplish otherwise or could not do
easily otherwise"
My proposed wording:
"Assistive technologies are products used by people with disabilities to
help accomplish tasks that they cannot accomplish or could not do easily
otherwise."
Received on Friday, 9 July 2004 08:18:05 UTC

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