- From: Frank Manola <fmanola@acm.org>
- Date: Mon, 12 Jan 2004 17:20:08 -0500
- To: Graham Klyne <gk@ninebynine.org>
- Cc: w3c-rdfcore-wg@w3.org
Graham-- Thanks for the review. Some comments below. --Frank Graham Klyne wrote: > I've just looked through Frank's proposed changes w.r.t. [1] and agree > that they are (a) editorial, and (b) desirable. (With a clarification > about fig 18.) > > [1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/WD-rdf-primer-20031010/ > > At 17:33 09/01/04 -0500, Frank Manola wrote: > >> I've just made a pass through the Primer PR and have discovered a few >> editorial nits that should be corrected: >> >> * in the TOC, sections 5.1 and 5.2 need to have "Defining" replaced >> by "Describing" to be consistent with the actual section titles. > > > Agree. > > >> * in Section 2.2, there are two instances of "example.com" that need >> to be changed to "example.org" to be consistent with the overall example > > > I only saw one, but I agree that .org would be more consistent. > There are really two, but they're hard to find (which is why I'm having to correct them now!) > >> * in Section 3.3, there's an "is" in the last sentence that should be >> "are". > > > It's not clear to me which way this should be, but I agree it's minor > editorial. Now that you mention it, I think I'm going to leave this the way it is (the *real* problem is my convoluted sentence structure, but I'm going to leave *that* alone!) > > >> * in Section 5.1, Figure 18 is upside down (class MotorVehicle should >> be at the top, not the bottom). This was fixed early last year in >> response to a comment from PPS, but somehow an earlier version of the >> figure got loaded into TR space and I missed it. This is just a >> matter of re-uploading the corrected figure. > > > Then the arrows should point upwards? Then I agree this is just editorial. Yes, the arrows should point upwards. The subClass hierarchy is exactly the same; PPS's comment was that people are used to class diagrams having the more general classes at the top.
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