- From: Graham Klyne <gk@ninebynine.org>
- Date: Mon, 12 Jan 2004 13:38:20 +0000
- To: Frank Manola <fmanola@acm.org>, w3c-rdfcore-wg@w3.org
I've just looked through Frank's proposed changes w.r.t. [1] and agree that they are (a) editorial, and (b) desirable. (With a clarification about fig 18.) [1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/WD-rdf-primer-20031010/ At 17:33 09/01/04 -0500, Frank Manola wrote: >I've just made a pass through the Primer PR and have discovered a few >editorial nits that should be corrected: > >* in the TOC, sections 5.1 and 5.2 need to have "Defining" replaced by >"Describing" to be consistent with the actual section titles. Agree. >* in Section 2.2, there are two instances of "example.com" that need to >be changed to "example.org" to be consistent with the overall example I only saw one, but I agree that .org would be more consistent. >* in Section 3.3, there's an "is" in the last sentence that should be "are". It's not clear to me which way this should be, but I agree it's minor editorial. >* in Section 5.1, Figure 18 is upside down (class MotorVehicle should be >at the top, not the bottom). This was fixed early last year in response >to a comment from PPS, but somehow an earlier version of the figure got >loaded into TR space and I missed it. This is just a matter of >re-uploading the corrected figure. Then the arrows should point upwards? Then I agree this is just editorial. >* in Section 6.1, just above Example 32, there's a reference to >Example 30 that should be a reference to Example 31. Agree. >* in the References, the [LBASE] reference has the right URL but the >wrong date (it should cite the 10 October 2003 version). Agree. #g ------------ Graham Klyne For email: http://www.ninebynine.org/#Contact
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