- From: Dominik Tomaszuk <ddooss@wp.pl>
- Date: Thu, 21 Apr 2011 16:43:20 +0200
- To: Henry Story <henry.story@bblfish.net>
- CC: WebID Incubator Group WG <public-xg-webid@w3.org>
On 21.04.2011 12:51, Henry Story wrote: > New version with some changes: > > http://bblfish.net/tmp/2011/04/21/ My cursory commands: 1. section 2 - point 1 - noted that this is Alice's protected HTTPS resource. It will be clearer. 2. section 2 - point 2 - as above (resource server -> Alice's resource server) 3. section 2 - fig 1. - IMHO Alice's Web Server -> Alice's Web Application Web Server 4. section 2 - point 5 - remove link https://bob.net/is/bob (it links nowhere) 5. section 2 - last paragraph https -> HTTPS 6. section 2 - URL -> URI (... can be an HTTPS URI...) 7. section 3 - IMHO subsection 3.3 should be 3.2 (3.2 TLS, 3.3 Comparison to OpenID) 8. subsection 3.3 https -> HTTPS 9. subsection 3.3 title TLS -> Transport Layer Security 10. document is not valid (I can fix it) [1] [1] http://www.w3.org/2011/identity-ws/#paper Dominik 'domel' Tomaszuk
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