WSA Core issues

None of the following is a showstopper for CR but ...

There is one LC resolution not reflected in the text

    * The text in section 4.1 regarding combining [message id] with
      something else that isn't unique either is still missing the "In
      such cases" qualifier agreed on in the resolution of LC90.

Things which stand out mainly because the rest of the text reads quite well:

    * In the introduction, the text "Web Services Addressing 1.0 - Core
      (WS-Addressing) defines two constructs, message addressing
      properties and endpoint references [...]" might be better with
      "endpoint references" first, since we define them first.
    * In section 1.1, "Pseudo schemas do not include extensibility
      points for brevity." might be better as "/For brevity,/ /p/seudo
      schemas do not include extensibility points for brevity." (The
      first version leads me to wonder whether they might include
      extensibility points for other reasons).
    * In section 1.1, "ocurrances" should be spelt "occurrences".
    * In the description of [reference parameters] in section 2.1, do we
      mean "Reference parameters are namespace-qualified element
      information items that are required to properly interact with the
      endpoint." (reference parameters must interact properly) or
      "Reference parameters are namespace-qualified element information
      items that are required /in order /to properly interact with the
      endpoint." (they enable proper interaction)?
    * In section 3.1, we describe the related message id in the
      [relationship] by "The related message is identified by an
      absolute IRI that corresponds to the related message's [message
      id] property."  I believe we mean "The related message is
      identified by an absolute IRI that corresponds to the related
      message's [message id] property." (i.e., the [message id] itself,
      not an IRI that corresponds to it).
    * In the description of wsa:RelatesTo in section 3.2, "/Each
      occurrence of t/This OPTIONAL (repeating) element information item
      contributes one abstract [relationship] property value, in the
      form of an (IRI, IRI) pair." might read better.

Received on Monday, 25 July 2005 19:28:36 UTC