Re: draft blog post

Hi, Chris-

A few more comments...

* "How we’re working, at WebPlatform.org"
This seems clumsy to me... I don't know if it's the comma, or what. 
Maybe "Workflow at Web Platform Docs" or "Getting Stuff Done at Web 
Platform Docs", or just removing the comma.

* "discussion methods"
This link leads to [TEST:discuss]. Please move this page into the WPD 
namespaces, and link to it from [WPD:Index].

* "including IRC, and a mailing list"
Remove comma. Add link to mailing list archives.

* "regular weekly meetings." ->
"regular weekly community meetings, simultaneously held on 
teleconference and IRC."

* "such as announcing Doc Sprints" ->
"such as announcing in-person Doc Sprints"

* "with subtasks." ->
"with subtasks and people assigned to complete them."

* "The next Doc Sprint we have coming up is in Berlin, Germany" ->
"The next Doc Sprint we have coming up is in Berlin, Germany, this week"

Regards-
-Doug

On 2/7/13 6:47 AM, Chris Mills wrote:
> Cheers  Peter - these were all great suggestions, and I've included
> most of them verbatim.
>
> The post is now published - see
> http://blog.webplatform.org/2013/02/how-were-working-at-webplatform-org/
>
>  Chris Mills Opera Software, dev.opera.com W3C Fellow, web education
> and webplatform.org Author of "Practical CSS3: Develop and Design"
> (http://goo.gl/AKf9M)
>
> On 6 Feb 2013, at 16:27, Peter Lubbers <peterlubbers@google.com>
> wrote:
>
>> Looks good, Chris. Some very minor suggestions for tightening up
>> the content. Feel free to ignore!
>>
>> Consider changing Moving forward with the huge amount of content
>> we’ve got was always going to be a challenge, especially as we are
>> but a few people, with a finite amount of time, many of us
>> volunteers. To: We knew it would be challenging to deal with this
>> much content, especially as we are mostly volunteers with only a
>> finite amount of time.
>>
>> Consider changing We’ve already achieved much, working towards our
>> goal of making WebPlatform.org the definitive client-side web
>> technology documentation site. But there is still much more to do,
>> which is why we opened it up to the wider community as an alpha.
>> To: We’ve already achieved much, working towards our goal of making
>> WebPlatform.org the definitive client-side web technology
>> documentation site, but there is still much more to do. That is why
>> we opened the site up to the wider community as an alpha. (The bold
>> "the" looks a little weird. consider italic)
>>
>> Consider paragraph break before "The plan was always"
>>
>> The sentence The plan was always to include the public as early as
>> possible, so more folks can join in and contribute. The web does
>> after all belong to all of us, and this is going to be such a great
>> tool, which will be useful to so many! does not read well How about
>> simply: The plan has always been to include the public as early as
>> possible. The web does, after all, belong to all of us.
>>
>> The text "For a start, we" leads me to think there will be a "Next,
>> we..." but it just becomes the bulleted list. Maybe just remove the
>> "For a start."
>>
>> Tighten the first bullet: To make the work more manageable, we have
>> started to split it into chunks, and then work on each in turn,
>> moving on to the next task when we have finished each one. Sounds
>> obvious, but it is so easy to become bogged down when you have so
>> much work to do. Maybe something like this: To make the work more
>> manageable, we have started to split it into manageable chunks and
>> we work on each item in turn. Sounds obvious, but it is so easy to
>> become bogged down when you have too much work to do. PL: Not sure
>> the last sentence "Sounds obvious..." adds very much. consider
>> dropping it.
>>
>> Drop comma in "who is working on each task, at"
>>
>> Stray bullet: * Get on with the tasks!
>>
>> Consider rewriting: We have a plan to get most pages relating to
>> these major areas sorted out in the next 2-3 months, but we need
>> your help! To: Our plan is to perfect the topic pages for these two
>> major areas over the next two to three months. This is where you
>> come in!
>>
>> Consider changing: bits of work To: focus areas
>>
>>
>> Regards, --Peter
>>
>>
>> On Wed, Feb 6, 2013 at 5:17 AM, Chris Mills <cmills@opera.com>
>> wrote: Hi all,
>>
>> I've put a draft of my webplatform blog post up at
>> http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=180&preview=true (How we're working,
>> at WebPlatform.org)
>>
>> Ok to publish this today or tomorrow?
>>
>> Chris Mills Opera Software, dev.opera.com W3C Fellow, web education
>> and webplatform.org Author of "Practical CSS3: Develop and Design"
>> (http://goo.gl/AKf9M)
>>
>>
>>
>
>

Received on Thursday, 7 February 2013 14:01:00 UTC