Re: Preview: KickStarter for Linked Data and Web Payments

Don't want to be too negative, but it seems very fluffy and non-concrete.
>From the text it doesn't become clear to me what is actually being propose
by whom: Who are the interns? Who are the world class mentors? And what are
they proposing to build? Is this a Digital Bazaar, Inc. project, Manu
Spory's personal thing or an official W3C campaign?

We are bringing together some of the brightest minds that build the
technology for the Web, with the best students from around the globe, to
build fantastic publishing tools for web developers and content creators on
the Web.


Who's "we"? It's not really clear who is the beneficiary of this campaign.
Similarly non-concrete: who are these mentors and why don't you introduce
the actual "world class students"?

 There are specific projects that the W3C has outlined as being big payoff
projects.


I think it would be beneficial to name the "specific projects" and link to
where W3C has identified these as big payoff projects (whatever that is).

The students have already submitted detailed project proposals that have
been approved by the W3C mentors.



Provide links to these. It just goes on and on like this, there are tons of
superlatives: "cutting edge initiatives", there were 40 proposals and the
top students and projects were picked. But really nothing concrete. That,
paired with the ominous "we" (which is apparently also "working with
Mozilla") and somewhat over-the-top name-dropping (Facebook! Google!
Microsoft!) make this kickstarter seem a bit scammy to me.

I certainly wouldn't trust it. Sorry to be so harsh.
Regards,
   -tim