Re: random comments on 2nd LC of WebArch (editorial)

/ Dan Connolly <connolly@w3.org> was heard to say:
| On Fri, 2004-08-20 at 08:46, Dominique Hazaël-Massieux wrote:
|> A few  points I noted while skimming through 
|> http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-webarch-20040816/
|> 
|> I hope I'll be able to make a more thorough review, possibly through the
|> QA WG.
|
| Thanks for the quick review.

Ditto.

| It helps if you try to make just one main point in each message
| to public-webarch-comments.
|
| I see 3 main points here; the first is a collection of
| editorial suggestions...
|
|> 
|> Editorial
|> - section 4.5.3 and 4.6 refers to [RDF10] which itself resolves to an
|> outdated version of the RDF Recommendation; it should probably link to
|> http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/REC-rdf-syntax-grammar-20040210/ instead

Fixed.

|> - it would be nice to add a class="glossary" to the <dl> of the glossary
|> section (see my previous comment on this [2])

Done.

|> - "A textual data format is one in which the data is specified as a
|> sequence of characters" ; I suggest mentioning somewhere something about
|> the encoding (ie, a big5-encoded text for a us-ascii processor may well
|> be considered as binary). e.g. "a textual data format in one in which
|> the data is specified in a defined encoding as a sequence of
|> characters".

Done.

|> - in 4.1 "thirty-two bit little-endian two's-complement and sixty-four
|> bit IEEE double-precision floating-point"; any reason not to use numbers
|> instead of "thirty-two", "two" and "sixty-four"? That impacts
|> readability.

None that I can think of. Fixed.

|> - using <code> around non-English prose would make better usage of HTML
|> semantics (e.g. a:element & co in 4.2.2)

Done.

|> - in 4.2.2, "A format specification SHOULD include information about
|> change policies for XML namespaces." is XML-format specific, which
|> suggests that the subject of the good practice "format specification"
|> should be qualified in consequence

s/A format specification/An XML format specification/

|> - regarding 4.2.4 "composition of data formats", "These relationships
|> can be mixed and nested arbitrarily" depends on the composition
|> mechanism defined in the data format; I don't think this apply to any
|> data format - I don't have an example handy, but I'm fairly sure there
|> are some types of XML you couldn't embed in a binary format for example.

I don't think that's relevant to the point that's being made and I
can't think of a better phrasing that wouldn't obscure the point.
But I'm open to suggestions.

|> - 4.5.7 has "These Internet media types create two problems" ; I think
|> "these media types" is too generic, since only the "text/*" are
|> concerned by the issued mentioned below that.

I replaced that phrase with "There are two problems associated with
the "text" media types"

|> - since the document acknowledges itself that it will have other
|> editions (or are they versions?), it may benefit from using a numbered
|> shortname (ie webarch10 instead of webarch), and follows pubrules with
|> regard to forward linking to newer versions

I think that requires discussion, I'll raise it separately.

                                        Be seeing you,
                                          norm

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