- From: Jeremy Carroll <jjc@hplb.hpl.hp.com>
- Date: Wed, 26 Jan 2005 16:53:41 +0000
- To: Phil Tetlow <philip.tetlow@uk.ibm.com>
- CC: public-swbp-wg@w3.org, ewallace@cme.nist.gov, Grady Booch <gbooch@us.ibm.com>
Phil Tetlow wrote: > > > > Jeremy, > > Ok, so I hope that a light hearted reply is in order? > > Interesting that you prefer to concentrate on the conclusions. I > personally felt that additional text was needed to recognised the excellent > work that both the ODM and UML teams have undertaken to get us to where we > are today. I further consider that the material in sections 7 & 8 of this > document is indeed important. It provides an extremely valuable context for > those who do not have the advantage of being as familiar with this area as > recognised experts such as yourself - This type of material is > unfortunately lacking within our community. Nevertheless, point taken - I > am a consultant by trade, so 'fluff' is my native dialect, only we have a > technical term for it....For me it is harder to be concise. I must > apologise. > > I think its really important to get across is the obvious overall value of > this document, as well as the individual recommendations it makes - right > or wrong. It is surely superb that such a comprehensive piece of work has > been undertaken at this opportune time and I'm enthused that it will help > to 'align' current thinking across a number of desperate camps. > I agree wholeheartedly that it is important to express enthusiasm, but I'm increasingly aware of the enthusiasm expressed by a short review such as this one: http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/www-qa/2005Jan/0028 [[ The CSS working group reviewed the document[1] and has no comments. We found the document clear and readable. ]] (that's a complete review) (that's probably a little too far the other way), A document editor wants to know - "did they like it?" "what do I need to do?". The first sentence of a review should answer the first question, the rest of the review the second; care should be taken to highlight important changes from unimportant changes. It's merely stylistic preferences, and yes it oftens takes longer to say the same in fewer words. Jeremy
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