RE: Please provide feedback on User Interaction Storyboard

hi bosse,



i think the storyboard is well put together, the facts are well laid out.



but i have two suggestions that might improve the impact, more a matter of
style than anything.



at the top, the problem is stated then the solution.  you might consider
stating the solution first, and the glorious benefits to humanity (i.e.
punch it up) then state the problems that are in the way of this wonderful
solution.



on the four panels i had to read quite a bit of verbiage before i understood
the point being made.  i would try to move the point to the first sentence
and make it as declarative and simple as possible.  yes, the audience is
knowledgeable but everyone appreciates conciseness.



cheers,

michael



Michael Miller

Principal Software Developer

www.teranode.com





*From:* public-semweb-lifesci-request@w3.org [mailto:
public-semweb-lifesci-request@w3.org] *On Behalf Of *Andersson, Bo H
*Sent:* Friday, March 26, 2010 6:47 AM
*To:* public-semweb-lifesci@w3.org
*Subject:* TMO: Please provide feedback on User Interaction Storyboard



Hi,



To be able to progress the work with the TMO – user interface/interaction we
need your feedback on the storyboard.



TMO-UI wiki: http://esw.w3.org/HCLSIG/PharmaOntology/Interface

Storyboard:
http://esw.w3.org/images/9/9b/HCLSIG%24%24PharmaOntology%24%24Interface%24translational_ontology_process_vB.pdf



Please send your feedback by Wednesday, March 31 at latest.



Kind regards,

Bosse
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