Re: Primer staged ready for review

Thanks
Paul

On Apr 9, 2013, at 17:17, "Miles, Simon" <simon.miles@kcl.ac.uk> wrote:

> Hi Paul,
> 
> We have adopted all changes you suggested for the primer.
> 
> https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/default/primer/Primer.html
> 
> thanks for the review,
> Simon
> 
> Dr Simon Miles
> Senior Lecturer, Department of Informatics
> Kings College London, WC2R 2LS, UK
> +44 (0)20 7848 1166
>  
> Modelling the Provenance of Data in Autonomous Systems:
> http://eprints.dcs.kcl.ac.uk/1264/
> From: pgroth@gmail.com [pgroth@gmail.com] on behalf of Paul Groth [p.t.groth@vu.nl]
> Sent: 03 April 2013 15:40
> To: Miles, Simon
> Cc: public-prov-wg@w3.org
> Subject: Re: Primer staged ready for review
> 
> Hi Simona and Yolanda,
> 
> Here are my comments on the Primer.
> 
> Overall, this is a really great document and I'm happy for it to be the final primer. I especially like the example and how it fits together in the very end. Some detailed comments are below.
> 
> Thanks
> Paul
> 
> ===Comments===
> 
> Abstract
> 
> - We need to be more specific about what the Primer is for. I would say "PROV Data Model for provenance interchange on the web" and not "PROV specification". 
> 
> - "PROV is a core data model" change to "PROV defines a core data model"
> 
> Introduction
> - Again watch out for PROV specification
> - Third sentence, I would remove "proposed"
> - In the "agent-centered provenance" bullet point can you replace "entities" with something else like people/organzations ?
> - Do you want references to FOAF and Dublin core in the paragraph under the bullet points
> 
> Section 2.9
> - remove ", as below"
> 
> Section 3.1
> - do you want to put a pointer in the last paragraph to the graphical conventions on the wiki? 
> 
> Section 3.11
> - Why don't you use the correct extension for the turtle (.ttl) and prov-n (.provn) files that you link to?
> 
> I wonder if section 3.11 should be a Section 4. I find the capabilities of PROV to be really interesting and useful to know. A suggestion?
> 
> Section 4: Summary
> Section 4.1 The Complete Example
> Section 4.2 Capabilities of PROV
> 
> 
> 
> On Fri, Mar 29, 2013 at 6:36 PM, Miles, Simon <simon.miles@kcl.ac.uk> wrote:
>> Hello,
>> 
>> The primer is now staged and ready for review:
>> 
>> https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/default/primer/NOTE-prov-primer-20130430/Overview.html
>> 
>> Please provide reviews by 4 April.
>> 
>> thanks,
>> Simon and Yolanda
>> 
>> Dr Simon Miles
>> Senior Lecturer, Department of Informatics
>> Kings College London, WC2R 2LS, UK
>> +44 (0)20 7848 1166
>>  
>> Evolutionary Testing of Autonomous Software Agents:
>> http://eprints.dcs.kcl.ac.uk/1370/
> 
> 
> 
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> http://www.few.vu.nl/~pgroth/
> Assistant Professor
> - Web & Media Group | Department of Computer Science
> - The Network Institute
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