- From: Peter E. Midford <peteremidford@yahoo.com>
- Date: Thu, 22 Jan 2009 23:20:26 -0600
- To: public-owl-comments@w3.org
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I reviewed two pieces of the OWL 2 Document set: the New Features and Rationale and the Quick Reference Guide. I did not find any issues in the Quick Reference Guide, but a number of issues in the New Features and Rationale document. I checked these against the Wiki version as of approximate 0400UT on 23 Jan. Comments: Overall this document needs to be spell checked - there were a lot of obvious spelling problems, which I won't waste space listing here. There were several other problems: Section 1 "two synthetic tables resume the links between the use cases" - I found this unusual usage. Perhaps change to "two tables establish links between use cases and requirements and examples respectively" Section 2 "extended annotation capabilities, database style keys" - This appears at the end of a list - either change this to an enumeration with a colon after 'w.r.t.' or change the comma after capabilities to 'and.' 2.1.1 F1 "This feature has been required as a shortcoming given..." - Perhaps change to "This feature addresses the shortcoming exposed by the common use of such statements..." 2.1.2 F2 Example - "Note: The FMA exhibit a huge number..." - change to exhibits 2.2.2 F5: Theoretical Perspective - "It was known from a long time that resulting logic is decidable" - Perhaps change to "It has been know for a long time that the result logic is decidable..." Implementation Perspective - "QCRs do not pose implementation problem either." - Change to "an implementation problem." or "implementation problems either." 2.2.3 F6 "Thus as illustrated by many use cases new charactersitics of properties, Reflexivity, Irreflexivity, Asymmetry, is a strong requirement." Perhaps change to "Thus, many use cases illustrate the desirability for adding Reflexivity, Irreflexivity, and Asymmetry as characteristics of properties." 2.2.6 F9: Key Example: HasKey( a:Transplantation a:donorId a:recepientId a: ofOrgan ) A space seems to have been introduced into a: ofOrgan. 2.4.1 F12: Punning "...annotation value "C. Welty" by the annotation property creator, and with the value 1994 by the annotation property year)." The final close parenthesis appears to be unmatched. UML Design example - The comment starting: "The same term a:PersonCompany..." is in the same monospace font as the example data, rather than the bold font used for comments. Theoretical Perspective - "On the opposite, OWL full did not impose this resctriction, but the style of metamodelling adopted in OWL full led to undecidability." - "On the opposite" is not a common idiom, perhaps "On the other hand..." or "In contrast..." Use Case #1- "Providing anatomical landmarks, especially in eloquent cortex, is highly important for surgery." I don't know what is meant by 'eloquent cortex.' Use Case #2 - Dangling period in - "...aligning existing and emerging ontologies in bioinformatics...” . Anatomy Use Case #18 - The first paragraph is confusing - the second paragraph explains the scientific purpose of virtual observatories, maybe just move the first paragraph, which seems to list the components of a virtual observatory, after the second paragraph. Hope these are helpful, Peter -- Peter Midford Phenoscape Ontology Curator
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