Re: [External Origin] Re: Draft messaging for upcoming release

Any chance someone could send the documents? The original email didn’t come through with them so it’s possible they got caught up in our security review. Maybe a second send would work.

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From: Jennifer Zhang <zhangjenniferx@gmail.com>
Date: Friday, November 1, 2024 at 2:12 PM
To: Stacey Swinehart <stacey.swinehart@gmail.com>
Cc: Sheri Byrne-Haber <sheri@sheribyrne.com>, public-maturity@w3.org <public-maturity@w3.org>
Subject: [External Origin] Re: Draft messaging for upcoming release
Thank you for these, Sheri! They look solid.
-Jennifer Z

On Fri, Nov 1, 2024 at 12:56 PM Stacey Swinehart <stacey.swinehart@gmail.com<mailto:stacey.swinehart@gmail.com>> wrote:
The content looks awesome!

I have a couple of minor grammar catches (Word might have already found these for you)

"For Wide Review: APA Group Note Accessibility Maturity Model 1.0"

  *   The last paragraph has extra spaces between periods and the first letter of the words in the following sentences.

The third doc, email draft:

  *   First sentence - missing a period
  *   Second paragraph - has an extra space after the period in the first sentence
  *   Fourth paragraph (after the bullet list in Overview) - has an extra space after the period in the first sentence
  *   Fifth paragraph (in seeking) - has an extra space after the period in the second sentence

Suggestion:

  *   For the items under "Comments" and "Please," use bullet list format instead.

Cheers!
ssg.



On Thu, Oct 31, 2024 at 6:08 PM Sheri Byrne-Haber <sheri@sheribyrne.com<mailto:sheri@sheribyrne.com>> wrote:
I've attached three documents for required messaging to release the
maturity model note based on the exemplars provided by Janina.

Please review before the meeting on the 6th, as we have a pretty tight
timetable to release by the 20th.

Thanks

Sheri