- From: Ronald P. Reck <rreck@rrecktek.com>
- Date: Wed, 07 Feb 2007 06:22:24 -0500
- To: public-grddl-wg@w3.org
http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/grddl-wg/doc29/primer.html 1. current> Alternatively the information needed to obtain the transformation may be held in an associated metadata profile document or namespace document. rationale: I think this needs a comma change> Alternatively, the information needed to obtain the transformation may be held in an associated metadata profile document or namespace document. 2. current> This document uses a number of examples from the GRDDL Use Cases document to illustrate in detail the techniques GRDDL provides for associating documents with appropriate instructions for extracting any embedded data. rationale: I think this needs two commas change> This document uses a number of examples from the GRDDL Use Cases document to illustrate, in detail, the techniques GRDDL provides for associating documents with appropriate instructions for extracting any embedded data. 3. current> XML Transformation languages such as XSLT are quite versatile in their ability to process, manipulate, and generate XML and the use of XSLT to generate XHTML from single-purpose XML vocabularies is historically celebrated as a powerful idiom for separating structured content from presentation. rationale: I believe this is a run-on and would be better as two sentences. change> XML Transformation languages such as XSLT are quite versatile in their ability to process, manipulate, and generate XML. The use of XSLT to generate XHTML from single-purpose XML vocabularies is historically celebrated as a powerful idiom for separating structured content from presentation. 4. current>A diagram indicating the sequence of steps described for obtaining RDF from a document using an explicit link to the transformation as described in the preceding paragraph rationale: we have a definate description for a diagram I dont see. I think also 'a' should be 'here' and we need a period. change>Here is a diagram indicating the sequence of steps described for obtaining RDF from a document using an explicit link to the transformation as described in the preceding paragraph. 5. current>In this case the profile transformation refers to a a stylesheet that can convert HTML containing Embedded RDF into RDF/XML. rationale: i think it needs a comma change> In this case, the profile transformation refers to a a stylesheet that can convert HTML containing Embedded RDF into RDF/XML. 6. current> A diagram indicating the sequence of steps for obtaining RDF from a document using the profile URI as described in the preceding paragraph rationale: same as #4 7. current> Then Jane can run queries can be run on merged calendars using SPARQL. rationale: mistake change>Then Jane's queries can be run on the merged calendars using SPARQL. 8. current>Jane the discovers her friends Robin and David are rationale: missing letter? change> Jane theN discovers her friends Robin and David are 9. current> Jane is pleased that she has found out all her friends can finally meet up at in Edinburgh. rationale: too many words? change> Jane is pleased that she has found out all her friends can finally meet up in Edinburgh. 10. current> There are various special interest publications online which feature hotel reviews as well as blogs which contain reviews by individuals. rationale: stylistically i would prefer the conjunction 'and' change>There are various special interest publications online which feature hotel reviews, and blogs which contain reviews by individuals. 11. current> Among the reviewers there may be friends and collegues of Jane and people whose opinion Jane values (e.g. friends and people whose reviews Jane has found useful in the past). rationale: remove 'may' to make a more believable statement change> The reviewers include friends and collegues of Jane and people whose opinion Jane values (e.g. friends and people whose reviews Jane has found useful in the past).
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