Re: Plain Language use case [was RE: Suggestion for Introduction]

> Sharron,
> Thanks for the reminder.  I've had the plain language draft use case  
> done for several weeks... but have finally posted the draft to the  
> wiki - comments welcome.  (Owen A. or anyone, would love your help,  
> if you can put the doc into xml...I frankly don't have time right  
> now, so just posted a word doc.)

http://www.w3.org/2007/eGov/IG/wiki/Use_Case_13_-_Plain_Language


> Also agree, Sharron, with your suggestion to start the Note off with  
> a brief, plain language intro.  The average person usually has a  
> hard time understanding "geek speak", so the more clear and simple  
> we can explain what we're trying to do, the better.  eGov is all  
> about "the people", so I think this needs to be written in language  
> the general public can understand.

Ok, maybe sort of ISSUE-10 again.

-- Jose


>
>
> Thanks!
> -Rachel
>
> Rachel Flagg
> Web Content Manager
>   and Co-Chair, Federal Web Managers Council
> Government Web Best Practices Team (on detail)
> Office of Citizen Services
> U.S. General Services Administration
> rachel.flagg@hud.gov
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: public-egov-ig-request@w3.org [mailto:public-egov-ig-request@w3.org 
> ] On Behalf Of Sharron Rush
> Sent: Saturday, April 18, 2009 9:58 AM
> To: public-egov-ig@w3.org
> Subject: Suggestion for Introduction
>
>
> Hello editors,
>
> In going through the wiki, I find a Pending Use Case around Plain
> Language.  That was the point I tried to make in my first message - I
> think we need to model that.  Rachel, can I support you in that work  
> in
> any way?
>
> But as a start, here is a suggestion for the Introduction.  I am a
> strong advocate for introductory text that simply lays the foundation
> and lets readers know what to expect.  I believe that we may want to
> include one short paragraph (an example is suggested below, but please
> feel free to reject or rewrite) and move all the other explanatory  
> text
> into the Background section.
>
> _Introduction:_
>
> The mission of the e-Government Interest group is to provide a forum  
> and
> leadership around the issue of how to improve access to government
> through better use of the Web and to achieve better government
> transparency using open Web standards.  We have pursued the mission in
> year 1 by setting these goals for the group:
>
> 1.      Explore the benefits and challenges for both citizens and  
> their
> governments of establishing effective, transparent and inclusive two- 
> way
> electronic communication and participatory systems of governing.
>
> 2.      Define the critical links that are needed between standards
> bodies and government entities to help citizens and governments meet  
> the
> challenges and realize the benefits.
>
> 3.      Develop a flexible list of concerns and deliverables to help
> build cooperative relationships that lead to productive next steps.
>
> To meet these goals, the group worked within three Task Forces:  
> Usage of
> Web Standards, Transparency and Participation, and Seamless  
> Integration
> of Data.  The following document describes our findings.
>
>
> ...so, what do you think?  If there is another avenue that you would
> rather I use for suggestions of this kind, please let me know.  And
> thanks for considering!
>
> Best,
> Sharron
>
>
>
>

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