Re: Grammatical fixes for PROF

Hi Annette,

Thanks for nailing down the specifics. I have addressed these that you pointed out and a number of others that I’ve found in reviewing the Introduction and Motivation sections via this Pull Request:

https://github.com/w3c/dxwg/pull/1189 <https://github.com/w3c/dxwg/pull/1189>

Please could you review this PR and, if you are happy with the changes and we can merge them in by next week, we can move to unanimity in the poll.

Thanks,

Nick


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> On 6 Dec 2019, at 4:50 am, Annette Greiner <amgreiner@lbl.gov> wrote:
> 
> Abstract, sentence 1: "vocabulary created to allows"
> 
> Abstract, sentence 3: "allows for those profile resources have formats..."
> 
> Overview of docs on profiles, last bullet is not part of the list.
> 
> Introduction, paragraph 2: "and a A profile, such as a profile <https://w3c.github.io/dxwg/prof/#dfn-profile> <link to data profile in glossary> or perhaps an application profile,..."
> 
> I figure it needs a careful editorial reading and calling out of items like the last above, to get agreement.
> 
> -Annette
> 
> On 12/5/19 2:56 AM, Nicholas Car wrote:
>> Hi Annette,
>> 
>> Can you please provide any direction here? I’d love to at least try and address your concerns before plenary time next week.
>> 
>> Thanks,
>> 
>> Nick
>> 
>> 
>> ______________________________________________________________________________________
>>  
>> kind regards
>> Nicholas Car
>> Data Systems Architect at SURROUND Australia Pty Ltd 
>> 
>> Address  P.O. Box 86, Mawson, Canberra ACT 2607
>> Phone     +61 477 560 177 <tel:++61+477+560+177> 
>> Email       nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com <mailto:nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com>Website   https://www.surroundaustralia.com <https://www.surroundaustralia.com/>
>> Enhancing Intelligence Within Organisations
>> delivering evidence that connects decisions to outcomes
>> 
>> 
>>> On 3 Dec 2019, at 2:14 pm, Nicholas Car <nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com <mailto:nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com>> wrote:
>>> 
>>> Hi Annette,
>>> 
>>> You indicated in your poll response for PROF publication as a NOTE that you "quickly ran into grammatical errors in places where there have been disagreements about what we mean”. Can you indicate these specifically so I can draft a PR to fix them? Of course, in the best case, you would submit such a PR!
>>> 
>>> Thanks,
>>> 
>>> Nick
>>> 
>>> 
>>> ______________________________________________________________________________________
>>>  
>>> kind regards
>>> Nicholas Car
>>> Data Systems Architect at SURROUND Australia Pty Ltd 
>>> 
>>> Address  P.O. Box 86, Mawson, Canberra ACT 2607
>>> Phone     +61 477 560 177 <tel:++61+477+560+177> 
>>> Email       nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com <mailto:nicholas.car@surroundaustralia.com>Website   https://www.surroundaustralia.com <https://www.surroundaustralia.com/>
>>> Enhancing Intelligence Within Organisations
>>> delivering evidence that connects decisions to outcomes
>>> 
>>> 
>> 
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> Lawrence Berkeley National Laboratory
>