Re: dwbp-ACTION-123: Call for comments

Laufer,

I enjoy reading your English.  You write very well.  Some comments:

Introduction:

1.  I'm not keen on the abstraction of roles in the first paragraph.
Publisher, Broker, and Consumer seems restrictive.  Why should we prescribe
roles and responsibilities for each, and how is a Broker really different
than a Consumer?

Audience:

2.  It is not always clear that your audience is as wide as you say it is.
Sometimes you seem to be writing for laymen and your descriptions are
clear.  Then a sentence later you switch to technical terms and your
audience seems to be for IT professionals who understand what machine
readable semantics are all about.  I think you should try to write for
laymen, even if it takes longer to explain terminology, because it will
ensure the document is read by the largest possible audience.

Challenges:

3.  Here I think you need to define up front what "Data" published on the
Web is all about.  Many readers may not understand that webpages themselves
are not "data" because unstructured text is stored in a different kind of
repository than "data".  A little history of the Web, and how "data" in
databases came to be published online - as opposed to behind a firewall in
a traditional enterprise application - would be helpful here as we can't
presume our audience understands this.

Lifecyle:

4.  Is the Data on the Web lifecycle different than other Data Lifecycle
Management lifecycles?  How?  Is it possible to compare and contrast them
to show the reader what is the same, what is different, and what is new?

Best Practices:

5.  I don't see how we are using the Publisher, Broker, Consumer roles or
why they event need to be defined.  Data is published.  Period.  We are
concerned with how to publish it in the best way.  How it is brokered and
consumed after is not part of our standard.  Nicht war?


Best Regards,

Steve

Motto: "Do First, Think, Do it Again"


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  |Laufer <laufer@globo.com>                                                                                                                         |
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  |Data on the Web Best Practices Working Group <public-dwbp-wg@w3.org>                                                                              |
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  |12/05/2014 09:46 AM                                                                                                                               |
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  |dwbp-ACTION-123: Call for comments                                                                                                                |
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Hello all,

I wrote a description for the beginning of the metadata section and I want
to ask the group to comment:

http://w3c.github.io/dwbp/bp.html#metadata

Thank you.

Cheers,
Laufer

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