RE: last changes?

i think we need the definition to be more testablesuch as what is a  significant financial loss


i guese it will be cleaner for the next verison

All the best

Lisa Seeman

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---- On Tue, 21 Feb 2017 17:10:11 +0200  Smith<smithjs@atos.net> wrote ---- 

    Hi All,
  
 How do these seem? Mostly the use of parenthesis to help with the “comma overload” plus an extension on the loss of rights and freedoms to cover people the user is acting on behalf of
  
 Important information:
 Information the user may need to complete any action or task (including offline tasks); or information related to safety, risk, privacy, health or opportunity.
  
 Critical service:
 A service that is needed to prevent  significant harm,  loss (such as significant financial loss), illness or injury to the user, a deterioration in the condition of a patient or the effective loss of rights or freedoms of the user or someone the user is acting on the behalf of.
  
 Jim
  
   From: lisa.seeman [mailto:lisa.seeman@zoho.com] 
 Sent: Tuesday, February 21, 2017 2:47 PM
 To: public-cognitive-a11y-tf <public-cognitive-a11y-tf@w3.org>
 Subject: last changes?
 
 
  
  Hi folks
 Can we tighten up the wording at all for the following
  
  
  important information
  information the user may need to complete any action or task including an offline task, or related to safety, risks, privacy, health or opportunities
  
 critical service
 service that is needed to prevent significant harm, risk or loss such as: significant financial loss, illness, injury or deterioration in a patient's condition or effective loss of rights or freedoms
  
  All the best
 
 Lisa Seeman
 
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