- From: Julian Reschke <julian.reschke@gmx.de>
- Date: Fri, 20 Aug 2021 15:31:26 +0200
- To: ietf-http-wg@w3.org
Am 23.07.2021 um 02:05 schrieb Mark Nottingham: > ... Hi there. I have opened a bunch of PRs fixing minor ediorial issues that seemed directly actionable. I'll also stress that Roy's issue about field name syntax (<https://github.com/httpwg/http2-spec/issues/902>) is important. The remaining comments are below: Section 1 "Specifically, it allows interleaving of request and response messages on the same connection..." This really reads strange, as request and responses travel in different directions. FWIW, HTTP/1.1 also allows that, no? (You can send a request while a response is already received). Maybe just say "Specifically, it allows interleaving of messages on the same connection..." ? Section 3.2 "A client that makes a request to an "https" URI uses TLS [TLS13] with the application-layer protocol negotiation (ALPN) extension [TLS-ALPN]." For a moment I thought that the document requires use of TLS 1.3 (which it does not later on). Maybe this should be clarified here. Section 4.3 "A field section is a collection of zero or more field lines" Which is the same as "A field section is a collection of field lines", right? I understand that using "zero or more" is used with the intention to be precise, but I'd really prefer to avoid it or just say "optional" where appropriate. (yes, this is a matter of taste) Section 8.8 1) The H2 parts of the examples use "host", not "authority:". Isn't this in conflict with 8.3.1: "Clients that generate HTTP/2 requests directly SHOULD use the :authority pseudo-header field instead of the Host header field."? 2) I think giving each example a subsection would make it clearer where examples begin and end; and also would improve linkability. Organization: In several sections, replacing lists by subsections would improve the ToC and make it easier to refer to specific items (frame types, error codes, pseudo header fields) Best regards, Julian
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