the "badly written" wording -- Re: comments on beta accessibility page (was Re: Phrase with "from using the web" - Re: w3.beta Comments for discussion)

catherine wrote:
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> My only hesitation is with the "badly-written" part of the last 
> sentence. I wonder if we really need it since we have "that are not 
> accessible". Seems a bit redundant. Maybe just say : "However, Web sites 
> and Web tools that are not accessible create barriers that exclude 
> people from taking equal part." ?

I'd like some more perspectives on this issue. I think Liam wanted to specifically say that the web is designed to be accessible, and when websites are done properly, they are accessible -- but when websites are *badly* done, then they create barriers. (actually his suggestion: "badly written web pages... re-introduce these barriers")

Saying "websites that are not accessible create barriers that exclude..." kind of loses the point that it's bad.

wording options:
a. However, badly written websites and web tools create barriers that exclude...
b. However, badly written websites and web tools that are not accessible create barriers that exclude...
c. However, websites and web tools that are not accessible create barriers that exclude...

Any other thoughts on this point?

~shawn

Received on Saturday, 29 August 2009 19:52:45 UTC