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p2-semantics proofreading

From: Anthony Bryan <anthonybryan@gmail.com>
Date: Sun, 7 Feb 2010 14:08:03 -0500
Message-ID: <bb9e09ee1002071108o42dcbb6di4846d06cce7803ec@mail.gmail.com>
To: HTTP Working Group <ietf-http-wg@w3.org>
I think apostrophes are typically used to show possession and contraction.
OLD
The individual values of the numeric status codes defined for
HTTP/1.1, and an example set of corresponding Reason-Phrase's, are
presented below.


"first match winning" might be better as "first applicable being
selected" or something?
OLD
To determine the URI of the resource a response is associated with,
the following rules are used (first match winning):
NEW
To determine the URI of the resource a response is associated with,
the following rules are used (with the first applicable one being
selected):


Is this mixing verb tenses? Should probably ask an English major,
instead of going by me. :)

OLD
The request has been fulfilled and resulted in a new resource being created.

NEW
The request was fulfilled and resulted in a new resource being created.
OR
The request has been fulfilled and has resulted in a new resource being created.


I am not sure if an individual working somewhere matters?

OLD
Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
resources belonging to individuals no longer working at the server's
site.

NEW
Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
resources belonging to individuals no longer hosting content at the
server's site.
OR
Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
resources no longer hosted at the server's site.


Double notification?

OLD
Note: Note to implementors: some deployed proxies are known to return
400 or 500 when DNS lookups time out.

NEW
Note to implementors: some deployed proxies are known to return 400 or
500 when DNS lookups time out.


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