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Re: p2-semantics proofreading

From: Julian Reschke <julian.reschke@gmx.de>
Date: Mon, 08 Feb 2010 17:26:46 +0100
Message-ID: <4B703B46.80509@gmx.de>
To: Anthony Bryan <anthonybryan@gmail.com>
CC: HTTP Working Group <ietf-http-wg@w3.org>
Anthony Bryan wrote:
> I think apostrophes are typically used to show possession and contraction.
> OLD
> The individual values of the numeric status codes defined for
> HTTP/1.1, and an example set of corresponding Reason-Phrase's, are
> presented below.

Fixed. (Made it say "Reason-Phrase values").

> "first match winning" might be better as "first applicable being
> selected" or something?
> OLD
> To determine the URI of the resource a response is associated with,
> the following rules are used (first match winning):
> NEW
> To determine the URI of the resource a response is associated with,
> the following rules are used (with the first applicable one being
> selected):

Done.

> Is this mixing verb tenses? Should probably ask an English major,
> instead of going by me. :)
> 
> OLD
> The request has been fulfilled and resulted in a new resource being created.
> 
> NEW
> The request was fulfilled and resulted in a new resource being created.
> OR
> The request has been fulfilled and has resulted in a new resource being created.

Picked the latter.

> I am not sure if an individual working somewhere matters?
> 
> OLD
> Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
> resources belonging to individuals no longer working at the server's
> site.
> 
> NEW
> Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
> resources belonging to individuals no longer hosting content at the
> server's site.
> OR
> Such an event is common for limited-time, promotional services and for
> resources no longer hosted at the server's site.

I think the point was to give examples, not to list all cases in 
general. The case of a person leaving a company is a good example, thus 
I'm not sure changing this would be an improvement.

> Double notification?
> 
> OLD
> Note: Note to implementors: some deployed proxies are known to return
> 400 or 500 when DNS lookups time out.
> 
> NEW
> Note to implementors: some deployed proxies are known to return 400 or
> 500 when DNS lookups time out.

Fixed!

Thanks, Julian
Received on Monday, 8 February 2010 16:27:27 GMT

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