Re: Status and links to Part 3

Dave Orchard writes:

> I did one small editorial change as suggested by NM,

Looks good, thanks!

> I think a bit more wordsmithing is in order for that section as it now 
seems to read a bit redundant to me.
 

FWIW, I'm OK with it as is.

Found a few other minor things:

* Typo:  descovers -> discovers

* Column widths in tables in 2.3 don't look so good in Firefox.  Speaking 
as an experienced editor to a somewhat less experienced editor, you can 
look forward to hours of fun trying to do tables in a way that look 
reasonable in most browsers, and that don't clip when printed from those 
browsers. 

* Editorial: suggest first paras of 2.2 be made into one.  I think the 
thoughs go together, and it's less visually choppy that way.  Not 
important obviously.

Overall, I need to revisit some of David Hull's concerns, but pending that 
this still looks pretty good to me.  I think the swap of the abnormal 
stuff is an improvement.  Much appreciated.  Thanks!

Noah

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"David Orchard" <dorchard@bea.com>
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07/20/2006 04:00 PM
 
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        Subject:        Status and links to Part 3


I've updated soap12 part3 [1] - first described at [2] - and checked the 
files into cvs.  I did one small editorial change as suggested by NM, 
which was to move the abnormal operation material a little lower.  I think 
a bit more wordsmithing is in order for that section as it now seems to 
read a bit redundant to me.
 
David Hull had a large number of substantial comments, suggestions, and 
rewrites such as [3], [4].  However, it's not clear to me if these are 
still held to or not.
 
>From an editorial perspective, I think we are up to date on the drafts. My 
work here is done.  The WG can always instruct me to make subsequent 
changes to the docs.
 
Cheers,
Dave
 
[1] http://www.w3.org/2000/xp/Group/6/soap12-part3
[2] http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/xml-dist-app/2006Jun/0000.html
[3] http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/xml-dist-app/2006Apr/0020.html
[4] http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/xml-dist-app/2006Jun/0004.html
 
Ps. This is my 5th set of activity in w3c cvs this week.  Previous items: 
TAG versioning finding, TAG minutes, ws-policy edits, xml schema 1.1 
versioning guide.  When it rains, it pours!

Received on Thursday, 20 July 2006 20:35:17 UTC