RE: [wbs] response to 'EOWG Publication Approval – Scripts for Evaluation Videos Changes'

Thanks Shadi,

I am happy with your suggested changes.

Kevin

Kevin White
Head of Accessibility
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
> Sent: 17 October 2019 11:03
> To: White K (Kevin) <Kevin.White@gov.scot>
> Cc: wai-eo-editors@w3.org
> Subject: Re: [wbs] response to 'EOWG Publication Approval – Scripts for Evaluation
> Videos Changes'
> 
> Hi Kevin,
> 
> Many thanks for your valuable feedback. Most of your comments have been
> addressed. Please see inline some clarifications:
> 
> 
> On 15/10/2019 14:48, Kevin White via WBS Mailer wrote:
> > Video 2: Seq 4: Is 'vendors' more US English? I would have used
> > 'supplier'.
> 
> I'm OK with "supplier" but want to run past the group for more input.
> 
> 
> > Video 2: Seq 6: This seems to repeat what is said in Seq 3. Not sure if
> > this is a problem, maybe just flagging it for editorial thought.
> 
> Changed to:
> 
> - "Sometimes doing even only some of these checks can give you an
> indication of the overall accessibility."
> 
> 
> > Video 3: Seq 7: Still not 100% on CD/CI - we don't expand the acronym and
> > it is specific to one audience. I don't think it is a huge problem... it
> > just jars a wee bit. Happy to go with consensus on this.
> 
> Changed to:
> 
> - "Tools can be integrated into different work environments. For
> example, into your web browser, content management system (C-M-S), and
> your development and deployment tools."
> 
> 
> > Video 3: Seq 9: I think there is a 'so' missing from this seq. What might I
> > do about inaccurate results? 'Make sure to do some spot checks of results'?
> > 'Make sure you plan for a full technical audit'?
> 
> Changed this sequence to:
> 
> - "Yet be aware that tools can, in some cases, provide inaccurate
> results too."
> 
> And the following one to:
> 
> - "So avoid relying too much on what tools say over addressing the
> real-life experience of website users."
> 
> 
> > Video 4: Seq 4: Still think this is an 'or' not an 'and' … maybe an
> > 'and/or'. For example it is often not realistic to consider an audit before
> > procuring a product (too many products, not enough time).
> 
> The starting sentence has the qualifier "often" already. These are all
> situations in which one will often want to evaluate, so I think "and"
> fits better than "or". Happy to discuss further as needed.
> 
> 
> > Video 5: Seq 3: 'Many approach accessibility as a checklist to meet' -
> > might not be the right form, current form sounds a bit funny when read
> > out.
> 
> Changed to:
> 
> - "Unfortunately many approach accessibility just as a checklist."
> 
> Does this address your concern? It does not sound funny to my non-native
> English ears...
> 
> 
> > Video 5: Seq 10: Suggest change from 'end-users' to 'users'. Makes it more
> > consistent with term elsewhere and also avoids the risk of missing out
> > other potential system users.
> 
> Good catch! Changed to:
> 
> - "Together these resources help you focus on accessibility for your
> website users rather than focusing on technical requirements only."
> 
> 
> Thanks,
>    Shadi
> 
> --
> Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/

> Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist
> Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
> World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
> 
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