- From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
- Date: Fri, 6 Dec 2019 13:09:14 +0100
- To: sduchateau@access42.net
- Cc: "wai-eo-editors@w3.org" <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
Thank you Sylvie, useful input! I think adding "in the following topics" makes it sound too formal. Hopefully removing the word *in* as you suggest and ensuring better intonation in the final voice-over will address the issue. Best, Shadi On 06/12/2019 12:06, Sylvie Duchateau wrote: > Hello Shadi, > > Reading the script makes it clearer. > > I did not have really understood the "expertise in" before the bulletted > list. > > In the intonation, the speaker says: you need expertise", then she makes > a pause, and then says: "in accessibility standards". > > > The script text displays: you need expertise in: > > [bullet]: accessibility standards... > > the script is, for the last bullet: "and how people with disabilities > use the Web." > > The speaker says: and in how people with disabilities use the Web". > > that's why I thought there was a word missing because of the intonation > I thought she was talking about the resource "how peopel with > disabilities use the web". > > So to make it clearer, change the intonation, but I'm sure it will be > done in the end. > > Or add: "To do effective conformance evaluation, "you need expertise in > the following topics" or something similar. > > Or do not say "and in how people with disabilities use the Web". > > I am not sure my explanations are clear as they are written, not > pronounced with intonation. > > Best > > Sylvie > > Access42 > > *Sylvie DUCHATEAU* > Experte accessibilité numérique > 09 72 45 06 14 — 06 62 33 68 12 > > Expertise et formation en accessibilité numérique > > Site web <https://access42.net/> — Twitter > <https://twitter.com/access42net> — LinkedIn > <https://www.linkedin.com/company/access42> — Newsletter > <http://eepurl.com/dgHY2b> > > Organisme de formation référencé au DataDock > et certifié par i.Cert <https://www.icert.fr/certifie/access-42/> pour > sa démarche qualité > > Le 06/12/2019 à 11:46, Shadi Abou-Zahra a écrit : >> Hi Sylvie, >> >> Many thanks for your quick response! Comments inline below: >> >> >> On 06/12/2019 11:33, Sylvie Duchateau via WBS Mailer wrote: >>>> Video 4: Comprehensive Evaluation (2nd Draft) >>>> >> [SNIP] >>>> >>>> >>> Comments: >>> I cannot find the script of the video for now, but I noticed one >>> incoherence in the spoken text. >> >> Here is the script: >> - >> https://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/wiki/Video-Based_Resources/Evaluation_Introduction#Video_4:_Comprehensive_Evaluation_.28.7E2_minutes.29 >> >> >>> I understand the beginning, that explains what a conformance review is, >>> then what you need to do effective comprehensive evaluation review : >>> "- expertise in accessibility standards, >> >> Not really. It says "To do effective conformance evaluation, you need >> expertise in:" -- maybe bad voice-over intonation? >> >> >>> - accessible web design and develompent, >>> - assistive technologies >>> and in how people with disabilities use the web". >>> This does not make sense for me. May be how people with disabilities use >>> the can help you for that. >>> Is somehting missing? >> >> No. To do effective conformance evaluation, you need expertise in ... >> how people with disabilities use the Web. Wonder where the confusion >> occurred and how to improve it. >> >> >>>> Video 5: Involving Users (2nd Draft) >>>> >>>> >> [SNIP] >>>> >>>> >>> Comments: >>> It was difficult to concentrate on this video as I only rely on >>> sound, not >>> visual, as the music is bit too loud in comparison with the >>> narration. But >>> I know that this will be changed in the next version. So it is not a >>> cruial >>> comment. >> >> Sorry about that. Yes, the music and volume corrections are not done. >> >> >> Many thanks, >> Shadi >> -- Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI) World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
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