Re: Planning editorial suggestions

Hey Kevin,

Yes, perfect: I'd be pleased to use Github to provide my recommend wording,
once the substantive content issue is settled: I've indicated that in
existing issue
https://github.com/w3c/wai-dynamic-planning/issues/6

Regarding the second comment, yes what you describe is indeed what I am
recommending.

Regards,
David

On 7 January 2016 at 05:05, Kevin White <kevin@w3.org> wrote:

> Hi David,
>
> Thanks for your comments in the Weekly Survey
> <https://www.w3.org/2002/09/wbs/35532/EOWG18Dec2015/results#xq5>. You
> mention your concerns over the introductory paragraph. This is certainly
> something I would welcome comments or recommendations for change on. Feel
> free to submit them via GitHub or via email if you are not yet comfortable
> with GitHub.
>
> Regarding your second comment, I just wanted to confirm, are you
> suggesting that each of the activities (for example Communicate Progress or
> Enhance Policies in the Implement section) should not be in a separate
> page. Instead there is one page for each of the sections (‘Initiate’,
> ‘Plan’, etc.) with all the content on that one page?
>
> Thanks
>
> Kevin
>



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