Re: Editorial comments for BAD

Thank you Cliff, all fixed.

Thanks,
   Shadi


On 7.10.2011 17:55, Cliff Tyllick wrote:
> On the Survey page, it should be "This Week's" instead of "This Weeks's" in both headings.
>
> On the home page, we need to remove the word "down" from the blurb under "Lack of brains hinders research." In other words, it should read:
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> Brain donations: huge drop off in brain donations due to the 'success' of 'Slow Traffic, Safe Streets' policy
> not:
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> Brain donations: huge drop off in brain donations down due to the 'success' of 'Slow Traffic, Safe Streets' policy
> Throughout the document, the first word in each sentence that follows a run-in headings should be capped. For example,
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> On the "News" page, in the last sentence under the heading "Tough Wahoonie," the word "Ordnance" should be "ordinance." ("Ordnance" is explosives; "ordinance" is a type of law.)
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> In the same sentence, "City" and "Winter" should be lower case; they are not proper nouns.
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> Similarly, in the second column, these words are not proper nouns and should be lower case:
> in all stories, Mayor (except where the mayor's name immediately follows it)
> in the first story:
> Judge
> Judges
> Trombone Forgery
> On the same page, there is an extra period at the end of "Your Shout."
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> On the same page, the last word should be "off," not "in."
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> If I have time to view the other pages, I will send edits for them, too.
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> Thanks!
>
> Cliff
>
>
> Cliff Tyllick
> Usability assessment coordinator
> Agency Communications Division
> Texas Commission on Environmental Quality
> 512-239-4516
> Cliff.Tyllick@tceq.texas.gov
>
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Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/
Activity Lead, W3C/WAI International Program Office
Evaluation and Repair Tools Working Group (ERT WG)
Research and Development Working Group (RDWG)

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