SV: Policies list Introduction [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED]

Hi Shawn and others
I'm starting my vacation in about 1 hour, and unfortunately I'm not back for EO calls until mid September (only first 2 weeks vacation). Re. the sentence: (A growing number of governmental policies address accessibility of information and communications technology (ICT), including websites, web applications, web browsers, and authoring tools. There is wide variety in how these are implemented, for example, some take the approach that access to information is a human right, and others require that ICT purchased by government must be accessible. Some are regional policies, some are national legislation, and some are government directives. Therefore, the categorization on this page is generalized.)
To me it looks like policies are regional, legislation is national, and directives only are made by governments; but IMHO you could have a national policy in a country. So maybe we could try something like: ...be accessible. Some are regulated by policies, some by directives and others have legislations, all of these can be on either National, regional or local.
There is also something with the sentence about the human right thing; it is almost an alternative to purchase of IT that I find a bit odd but hard to explain exactly what it is. Hope this make some sense.  

Under the heading: Countries and Regions the first is United Nations. Is that a region or a country? I think we should but the UN by itself before the listing of countries and regions. Are we thinking of other regions than the EU?
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Helle
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-----Oprindelig meddelelse-----
Fra: Arch, Andrew [mailto:Andrew.Arch@finance.gov.au] 
Sendt: 11. august 2011 05:04
Til: Shawn Henry; Denis Boudreau; Helle Bjarnø; Sylvie Duchateau; Emmanuelle Gutiérrez y Restrepo; Liam McGee; Jennifer Sutton
Cc: wai-eo-editors; Andrew Arch
Emne: RE: Policies list Introduction [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED]

Hi Shawn & Jennifer,

Reads well - much more concise :) Just a few editorial suggestions below, and a comment re "Updates Welcome".

Editorial suggestions:
1. "There is wide variety in how these are implemented ..." could be "There is wide variation in how these are implemented ..."
2. "... a lack of legislative activity in that country." could be expanded to "... a lack of legislative activity in that country, but maybe just that we haven't been provided with details." And, yes, I know we call for submission and updates a little further down, but I think this makes the current para more qualified and complete.
3. "... includes Authorized Translations" could be expanded slightly to "... includes existing Authorized Translations and invites additional ones."

In "Updates Welcome" it could be construed that we are just seeking updates to the existing material. I.E. tell us if something is wrong or missing from a particular (existing) country. I would like to see a sentence inviting 'new' entries for countries that aren't yet listed on the page. This would compliment my editorial suggestion.

Cheers, Andrew


-----Original Message-----
From: Shawn Henry [mailto:shawn@w3.org]
Sent: Thursday, 11 August 2011 11:40 AM
To: Arch, Andrew; Denis Boudreau; Helle Bjarnø; Sylvie Duchateau; Emmanuelle Gutiérrez y Restrepo; Liam McGee; Jennifer Sutton
Cc: wai-eo-editors
Subject: Policies list Introduction

  To those particularly interested in the Policies page,

Jennifer and I have edited the Introduction at http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/policy-updates

We welcome feedback now. We plan to go over it with Judy before we bring it to EOWG.

Helle, I'd particularly like your input on: "Some are regional policies, some are national legislation, and some are government directives." I put the last part as a placeholder, but don't like it, especially in context with the rest of the Introduction. How would you categorize the situation in countries like Denmark?

Regards,
~Shawn


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