- From: Andrew Arch <andrew@w3.org>
- Date: Fri, 12 Mar 2010 10:38:23 +0000
- To: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>, wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
As I've already said Shadi, looking pretty good :) and incorporating Suzette's suggestion of lists works well for me. Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: > Hi, > > Ref: <http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/PWD-Use-Web/2009/scenarios> A few comments and suggestions ... > I've done some more tweaks based on the previous EOWG discussion and on > other feedback received. Find below a description of these changes: > > > # Introduction > - Editorial tweaks to better caution the reader that these are just a > few examples and by no means an exhaustive listing. There still seems to be some confusion about this being examples rather than inclusive. It is quite clear to me, but maybe the opening sentence could become slightly less definitive, eg: "The following scenarios illustrate how *some* people with a variety of disabilities ..." Eds-discretion: "People with disabilities are as diverse as any people ..." -> "People with disabilities are as diverse as anyone/everyone ..." > # Scenario 2: Reporter with repetitive stress injury > - Paragraph 4 has been split out, and describes keyboard accessibility > in more detail (especially skip-links and other shortcut mechanisms). I think this works well. WRT reporter/journalist - I prefer journalist but can live with reporter. > # Scenario 3: Online student who is deaf > - Ms. Martinez is hard of hearing rather than deaf to better reflect > the different types of hearing disabilities. > > > # Scenario 4: Accountant with blindness > - Ms. Laitinen now uses a virtual learning environment to train staff > at her company. I suspect there could be confusion over the term 'senior accountant'. To me it implies a position of higher responsibility (like 'senior management' in the training examples) rather than older in age. But recent teleconf discussion has indicated that others may be reading it as an older employee. Often the two go hand-in-hand, but not necessarily. No immediate grammatical solution comes to mind, but I'll keep thinking. Para4 typo: "must frequently trains" -> "must frequently train" also consider: "much of the staff" -> "many of the staff" > # Scenario 5: Classroom student with dyslexia > - Last paragraph has been split out into two, and the former further > describes the benefits of accessible online libraries. Wonder if the last para should say 'multiple navigation methods'? # Scenario 6: Retiree with several aging-related conditions para 4 - suggest: do not support text enlarging -> do not support text enlarging properly Also agree with Shawn about the difficulty in hearing audio captcha, so maybe augmented with audio as some do is the way to mention this. My understanding of central vision loss was that this is the area that enabled detail to be distinguished, hence it would usually result in difficulty with small text. Eg AMD results in loss of central vision: http://www.visionaustralia.org/info.aspx?page=605 # Scenario 7: Supermarket assistant with cognitive disability para 4 typo: "showed him a software" -> "showed him some software" > # Scenario 8: Teenager with deaf-blindness > - Paragraph 4 now describes how Ms. Kaseem uses GPS and location based > services on her mobile phone. > - Paragraph 5 now describes the issue of text not wrapping when it is > enlarged in some formats. As Ms Kaseem has only recently acquired low vision, I suspect she would probably not be using a refreshable braile device, though is her condition is expected to continue to deteriorate, then she may be learning braile (slowly as suggested). As we already have a braile reader user in #4, maybe this is not required here? > Thank you for your comments, more thoughts and feedback welcome. > > Best, > Shadi > > > Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: >> Hello, >> >> Ref: <http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/PWD-Use-Web/2009/scenarios> >> >> The "Scenarios" page of "How People with Disabilities Use the Web" has >> been updated and is ready for your review. Please focus on these types >> of questions for this round of reviewing: >> >> - are the types of disabilities, browsing methods, and accessibility >> provisions outlined in the scenarios sufficiently illustrative? >> >> - is each scenario informative for web developers, yet equally easy to >> follow for any other reader who is new to web accessibility? >> >> - is the cross-linking to other pages in this resource sufficiently >> clear and easy to understand? (note: not all the links work yet) >> >> Note: the initial version of each scenario is linked from the bottom >> of each scenario, in case you want to compare back with previous work. >> You can also find a version with notes and suggestions from the >> WAI-AGE TF: >> - <http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/PWD-Use-Web/2009/Overview-bak> >> >> Reminder: feel free to send comments and suggestions that you want to >> discuss to the EOWG and WAI-AGE TF mailing lists: >> - WAI-AGE TF <public-wai-age@w3.org> >> - EOWG <w3c-wai-eo@w3.org> >> >> Minor editorial comments that don't need discussion can be sent to: >> - EOWG Editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org> >> >> Looking forward to further discussion on this resource. >> >> >> Best, >> Shadi >> >
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