- From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
- Date: Tue, 09 Mar 2010 09:53:23 -0600
- To: wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
> Ref: <http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/PWD-Use-Web/2009/scenarios> This is looking really good! A few comments from spot skimming (that is, I did not go over the entire page yet): * Mr. Yunus... has some central-field vision loss... Mr. Yunus has difficulty reading small text..." These are two different things. * "He prefers to enlarge the text only rather than the entire web page, since enlarging the entire web page distorts the images and forces him to scroll horizontally to read some of the text." This depends on how the web page is designed and on the browser and on how much he zooms. With the browser and zoom that I use, I rarely have a problem with distorted images and seldom with horizontal scrolling. I'm concerned as it is now, people will assume that zoom always distorts images and causes horizontal scrolling. * "Unfortunately Mr. Yunus discovered that many websites do not support text enlarging and text on the web pages starts to overlap each other as he increases the text size." There are two different things here. 1. text sized with relative units instead of absolute units. 2. hard coded text areas etc that result in overlapping when text size is increased. While I assume we don't want to go into the technical details here, I think it needs to be made clear that there are different issues. Also "many websites do not support text enlarging" makes it sound like there is something extra the website needed to do to support text resizing. Instead, can we say something more along the lines of "many websites are not designed to work with text resizing" or some wording that makes it even more clear that the website did something wrong instead of didn't do something extra for text resizing? (/me wonders how much of an issue this is in other parts of the document?) * "are CAPTCHA images" - I think need to say a little more about what these are, or link to explanation. * "Only few websites provide alternatives to CAPTCHA images, such as sound files..." It's probably OK to leave this as is; however, I am compelled to point out that I have extreme difficult with all of the audio alternatives to CAPTCHA. I've tried several out of curiosity (or because I wasn't getting the visual one right) and have never been able to sufficiently distinguish the characters from the background noise. I suspect many older people would also have difficulty. * What about adding that sometimes there are things where the text does not increase at all -- such as little movie like things and big forms that open in a new window... --- * "Ms. Kaseem... is deaf and recently acquired low vision so that she can only see small portions of a screen... she uses a screen reader to drive the refreshable braille display, which she reads slowly." - it seems highly unlikely or at least highly unusual for a teenager who recently lost sight to be able to read braille. in fact many people who are blind do not know braille, yet many of the uninformed assume that all people who are blind know braille. i think it would be better not to reinforce this misunderstanding. - "recently acquired low vision" is a bit awkward phrasing. for one thing, 'acquired' often means one actively sought something, e.g., bought it; for another "low vision" is a category, not a noun. --- # Introduction - Editorial tweaks to better caution the reader that these are just a few examples and by no means an exhaustive listing. * Suggestion: add "some" or "a few" or something like that to the first sentence; as in: "The following scenarios illustrate how some people with different kinds of disabilities, including people with ageing-related impairments, use websites and web-based applications. " - /me thinking we've used the phrase "age-related", checked, yup: site:www.w3.org age-related = about 1,040 site:www.w3.org ageing-related = about 183 * "these users make use of" -> "people use" (twice). Could simplify and shorten second two sentences into one: "The scenarios show how some people use assistive technologies, adaptive strategies, and accessibility features in websites, web browsers, and other tools." * Second paragraph needs tersification. For example, can you delete all together this sentence: "They are examples of individuals engaging in activities that are possible using current web technologies and assistive technologies."? reminder of somewhat similar wording around http://www.w3.org/WAI/users/involving.html#diverse and also fyi: http://www.uiaccess.com/accessucd/analysis.html#diverse # Scenario 3: Online student who is deaf - Ms. Martinez is hard of hearing rather than deaf to better reflect the different types of hearing disabilities. * I wonder if it's confusing to have "deaf" in the scenario title when the persona is "hard of hearing"? # Scenario 8: Teenager with deaf-blindness * I wonder if it's confusing to have "deaf-blindness" in the title when the persona has low vision? --- * Minor point: The scenario titles have the disabilities except "Scenario 6: Retiree with aging-related conditions" It would be nice to list them there, too. * "art-history" -> "art history" * "grand children" -> "grandchildren" * spell check, eg mechansims --- All for now... ~Shawn
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