Re: Training Materials Part 1 -- Developing Web Accessibility Presentations and Training: Overview:

Hi Jennifer,

Thanks for these comments, and for Part 2 re 'Topics'.

I've integrated some of them into the current drafts for EO review.

Andrew

Jennifer Sutton wrote:
> EOWG Editors:
> 
> Here is the first of the two parts I have to send today. I'll go through 
> the other two pages as quickly as I can.
> 
> Andrew, please don't spend time commenting on these comments. All are 
> editor's discretion.
> 
> Jennifer
> 
> Part 11. Developing Web Accessibility Presentations and Training: Overview:
> 
> http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/Overview.html
> [Editor's draft in progress - updated 11 August 2010]
> 
> 1.1. "to help their audience/students understand
> more about web accessibility."
> 
> JS:  I wonder whether "more about" should be deleted. Audience/students 
> may not know anything at all.
> 
> 1.2. "to updated statistics"
> 
> JS:  Is the word "updated" needed?  It makes it sound like stats are old 
> in other places on the site.  Even if it's true, perhaps it's not a good 
> idea to emphasize it.
> 
> 1.3. Maybe there should be a transitional phrase introducing the three 
> additional pages, something like:
> 
> "The training suite includes this page along with suggested 
> "Accessibility Topics," "Presentation Outlines," and a "Workshop outline."
> 
> Maybe it isn't necessary to make these three references into links since 
> the links come next. And maybe what I've proposed here can be "tersified."
> 
> 1.4. Speaking generally, and I won't comment on this again in my 
> comments on the whole set of training pages, I often see the use of "an 
> example," but I wonder if "a sample" might be better at times. Maybe I 
> am being Americentric.
> 
>

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