Training Materials Part 1 -- Developing Web Accessibility Presentations and Training: Overview:

EOWG Editors:

Here is the first of the two parts I have to send today. I'll go 
through the other two pages as quickly as I can.

Andrew, please don't spend time commenting on these comments. All are 
editor's discretion.

Jennifer

Part 11. Developing Web Accessibility Presentations and Training: Overview:

http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/Overview.html
[Editor's draft in progress - updated 11 August 2010]

1.1. "to help their audience/students understand
more about web accessibility."

JS:  I wonder whether "more about" should be deleted. 
Audience/students may not know anything at all.

1.2. "to updated statistics"

JS:  Is the word "updated" needed?  It makes it sound like stats are 
old in other places on the site.  Even if it's true, perhaps it's not 
a good idea to emphasize it.

1.3. Maybe there should be a transitional phrase introducing the 
three additional pages, something like:

"The training suite includes this page along with suggested 
"Accessibility Topics," "Presentation Outlines," and a "Workshop outline."

Maybe it isn't necessary to make these three references into links 
since the links come next. And maybe what I've proposed here can be 
"tersified."

1.4. Speaking generally, and I won't comment on this again in my 
comments on the whole set of training pages, I often see the use of 
"an example," but I wonder if "a sample" might be better at times. 
Maybe I am being Americentric.

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