Wordsmithing suggestions for How to Report Inaccessible Websites

Some follow up comments to this morning's discussion of 
<http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/responding/>How to Report 
Inaccessible Websites

1. While the group appreciates the directness of "complaining" and 
"complain" watch for repetitive use within short paragraph of span of 
sentences.

2. Second sentence, second paragraph of "Approach" section
Change:  Approaching an organization with an angry, aggressive tone 
will usually reflect badly on you and the accessibility cause, and 
not result in a good response.

To: Approaching an organization with an angry, aggressive tone will 
usually reflect badly on you and the accessibility cause.  As a 
result, you may not get the best outcome.

3.  In "Why Bother" section
Change:  Your effort in taking the time to contact an organization 
that has an inaccessible website may turn out to have an impact and 
result in improvement that will benefit many others.

To: Your effort in taking the time to contact an organization that 
has an inaccessible website may have an impact and result in 
improvement that will benefit many others.

4. Also in "Why Bother" section
Reconsider "front-of-mind"

Reconsider "And, as we said earlier..." if previously said, why repeated?

Thanks for considering,
Sharron