Re: w3.beta Comments for discussion

Thanks, Sharron. I implemented some of your suggestions and added the others for EOWG discussion.

Looking forward to your input on wordsmithing when we get to that point.

~Shawn

Sharron Rush wrote:
>> *EOWG active participants*, please comment on:
>> a. When websites and web tools are not accessible, they disable people.
>> b. When websites and web tools are not accessible, they disable people 
>> from using them.
>> c. When websites and web tools are not accessible, they cause disability.
>> d. When websites and web tools are not accessible, they cause 
>> disability for people.
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> +1 for b
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>> EOWG, please comment on options:
>> - link acronym only, as in 
>> http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/4betaW3org/accessibility-new-w3c20090821a#learn 
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>> - link full name and acronym, as in 
>> http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/4betaW3org/accessibility-new-w3c20090818a#learn 
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> +1 for full name and acronym
> 
> Additional comments:
> I also strongly agree with Alan's comment and support amending the 
> statement as he suggested
>> " I would say that "The Web has *the potential* to radically change 
>> the nature of disability..."
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> And I am still a bit uncomfortable with the directive to "Think about 
> what this means..." Is there a way to cause that "pause and think" 
> without seeming quite so imperative?  perhaps "Consider the 
> implications..." or "Consider what this means..."  or "If you really 
> think about what this means..."
> 
> Next, there was a suggestion about the first paragraph on the page, to 
> clarify the meaning of "Accessibility focuses on this last aspect, and 
> overlaps with the others."  The suggestion was to say "Accessibility 
> focuses on this last aspect - ability - and overlaps with the others." 
> It seems to me that would avoid any misunderstanding about the reference 
> being specifically to mental ability as the last in the list.
> 
> Within the examples, if we graphically illustrate two of the examples, 
> should we not, for consistency, also illustrate the third?
> 
> We are not yet wordsmithing, is that right?  There are some minor word 
> order changes and other grammatical suggestions I would make when 
> appropriate.
> 
> What good work this is, overall.  Nicely done Shawn, Liam and all.
> 
> Best,
> Sharron
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Received on Friday, 28 August 2009 00:34:41 UTC