Re: stab at betaw3 accessibility page

I really like the opening pitch, it's exactly what's needed. Here are a 
few suggestions:

* Perhaps the "computer, software" could be a little more detailed, to 
balance the detail in the "eyesight, hearing, ..."bit.

* It might be interesting to start the "this may be due to..." phrase 
with something more general like "it can happen to anyone, anytime" and 
perhaps "happens to us all eventually as we grow older" then "can be 
permanent impairment, injury"

* The second page starts with "Inaccessible web pages" without 
explaining what inaccessible means. Perhaps it would possible to expand 
the word into an explanation like "Web pages that do not take account of 
this diversity are badly designed. They disable people. We call this 
inaccessibibility. The W3C's..."

* Will people understand what "protocols" means here? I don't.

* The ocean of links at the end is like walking into quicksand. I think 
what's needed here is some more introduction, to develop what comes 
before (which is very brief). I don't think we should reproduce the WAI 
homepage here. It's focus is Web accessibility, not just WAI.

I have to dissent about the TBL quote at the start. To say that the Web 
was "*designed* as a universal space" is misleading. "We would like the 
Web to be a universal space" is closer to reality. There is nothing 
about the Web that makes it accessible to everyone by default any more 
than in the physical space. That's why this page is here. Actually TBL 
elaborated with "By Universal I mean that the web is declared to be able 
to contain in principle every bit of information accessible by networks" 
[1] which is somewhat different. The original quote captured this 
clearly, even if it is more restrictive in scope.

But very much +1 to the opening section.

Alan



[1] http://www.w3.org/DesignIssues/Axioms.html




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Received on Wednesday, 19 August 2009 06:45:46 UTC